Diary
We are staying at a hotel after we finished car trip for 11days.The phrase "eleven days" is ambiguous (two possible meanings). Do you mean: "We are staying at a hotel for eleven days" or "Our car trip (before we came to this hotel) was eleven days long"? Depending on the meaning, here are two options:
"We are staying at a hotel after finishing an eleven-day car trip."
"We are staying at a hotel for eleven days after having finished out car trip."
This hotel is the cheapest one we could find inside the Auckland cCity*, therefore their facilities are old and smell bad. They makes** me feel that like I'm in a cell.
It's These are the last 2 days until we can move into our house which has ocean views and is cozy. I wanna want to*** move asap. Happy Xmas.
* Auckland City - because "Auckland City" is the name, you don't need "the" and you do need to have both words in the name capitalized (big-A and big-C). Most cities don't have "City" as part of their name, and so we only capitalize the words that are part of the name. 千葉市 for example would just be "Chiba" (or "the city of Chiba") in English. So we would say, "the cheapest hotel in Chiba" or "the cheapest hotel in the city of Chiba."
Also, you used the word "inside" - just as you would say 中に in Japanese. In English, we would usually only use "inside" (sometimes with "of") for buildings or structures. (例えば、"inside the box" or "inside of the shop"). For a city, town, park, etc., we would probably say either "in New York" or "within New York."
** Present Tense of "to make" is "makes" for 2nd person singular ("he makes me" "she makes me" "it makes me"), but it is "make" (without an "s") in all other forms. ("you make me" "they make me" "I make you" "we make them" etc.). I know, this rule doesn't make much sense.
*** "Wanna" vs "Want to" - In informal speech, we often say "wanna." But we never write it. It looks very strange! (One exception: the song "Do You Wanna Dance" - which was originally called "Do You Want to Dance" but in 1965 the Beach Boys changed it to "Do You Wanna Dance." So . . . unless you are a rock star, you should write "want to"!)
Have fun moving into your new cozy home with a view! Enjoy it!
Diary
We are staying for 11 days at a hotel. We just finished a car trip. This hotel is the cheapest one inside Auckland city, therefore their facilities are old and smelly. It makes me feel like I'm in a cell.It's only 2 days until we can move to our house which has ocean views and is cozy. I want to move asap. Happy Xmas.
Very well written!
