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WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF BEING A CELEBRITY? Who has not ever dream they could be like Madona, Beyonce or any other celebrity? Being as famous and rich as them is something we have all ever dream of. However, is being a celebrity perfect? Does it have any inconvenient? To start with, it is obvious that it has many advantages. Celebrities are generally richer than the average people, have money to travel and can afford whatever they want. In addition, many opportunities arise when people become famous, whether they are career related or not. Moreover, they get special treatment whenever they go, you can’t expected to be treat the same way if you are eating or hosting in the same restaurant or hotel that Cristiano Ronaldo is right? On the other hand, despite the common perception that they have everything in life and they don’t have problems, that’s untrue. They are human beings like the rest of us, and being a famous has its drawbacks too. Lack of privacy is one of the biggest disadvantages of being a celebrity; wherever they go they might be paparazzi following them, and some fans can even become stalkers. All their life is exposed and they are constantly judge. Furthermore, being famous can involve having having fake friends, which you don’t know if really love you or they just have something to gain or they want something from you. Therefore, in conclusion, being a celebrity has advantages as well as disadvantages despite the perfect perception we have of fame, and not being able to enjoy a peaceful life is something not everyone can bear.
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WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF BEING A CELEBRITY?

Who has not never dreamed/dreamt they could be like Madonna, Beyoncé or any some other celebrity? Being as famous and rich as they is something we have all ever dreamed/dreamt of. However, is being a celebrity perfect? Does it have any inconvenient drawbacks?

To start with, it is obvious that it has many advantages. Celebrities are generally richer than the average people person, have money to travel and can afford whatever they want. In addition, many opportunities arise when people become famous, whether they are career-related or not. Moreover, they get special treatment wherever they go, you can’t expected to be treated the same way if you are eating or hosting in the same restaurant or staying in the same hotel that as Cristiano Ronaldo is, right?

On the other hand, despite the common perception that they have everything in life and they don’t have problems, that’s untrue. They are human beings like the rest of us, and being a famous has its drawbacks too. Lack of privacy is one of the biggest disadvantages of being a celebrity; wherever they go there might be paparazzi following them, and some fans can even become stalkers. All Their entire life is exposed and they are constantly being judged. Furthermore, being famous can involve having having fake friends: which you don’t know if they really love you, or if they just have something to gain, or if they want something from you.

Therefore, in conclusion, being a celebrity has advantages as well as disadvantages despite the perfect idealized perception we have of fame, and not being able to enjoy a peaceful life is something not everyone can bear.
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Italics: a nicer way to say something, the original is not wrong, it just doesn't sound that natural.

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WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF BEING A CELEBRITY?

Who hasn't ever dreamt to be like Madona, Beyonce or any other celebrity? Being as famous and rich as them is something we have all [ ] dreamt of. However, is being a celebrity perfect? Does it have any negative aspects?/Is it inconvenient in any way?

To start with, it is obvious that it has many advantages. Celebrities are generally richer than the average person, have money to travel and can afford whatever they want. In addition, many opportunities arise when people become famous, whether they are career related or not. Moreover, they get special treatment wherever they go, you can’t expect to be treated the same way if you are eating or being hosted/staying in the same restaurant or hotel as Cristiano Ronaldo is, right?

On the other hand, despite the common perception/conception that they have everything in life and they don’t have any problems, that’s untrue. They are human beings like the rest of us, and being [ ] famous has its drawbacks too. Lack of privacy is one of the biggest disadvantages of being a celebrity; wherever they go there might be paparazzi following them, and some fans can even become stalkers. All their life is exposed and they are constantly judged. Furthermore, being famous can involve having [ ] fake friends, so you don’t know if they really love you or if they just have something to gain or if they want something from you.

Therefore, in conclusion, being a celebrity has advantages as well as disadvantages, despite the perfect perception we have of fame/despite our perception of fame being perfect. [ ]  Not being able to enjoy a peaceful life is something not everyone can bear.
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