any problem in this paragraph? This is used for formal writing(Statement of purpose), could anyone help me fix it ? I have always been in the top 10 since my first year of primary school, and this record remains to my college graduation. I attended the Chinese Geography Olympiad (Fujian Province) in 2008, when I was in my second year of high school. I was awarded The Excellent Student Leader in 2011 by our department and my university. This award has very strict requirements. Only less than twenty students out of 1200 students are awarded. Though very successful in most time, there was one frustration. I graduated from high school in 2009 and took Chinese College Entrance Examination the same year. However the exam result of one course turned out to be unreasonably bad, for which I still do not know the reason.

请问，在英语中，“在我高二的时候”怎么说。 Second year of high school? Does anyone knows how to say " When I was in the second year of my high school"

Personal statement 2 I was born in a highly educated family. My parents both graduated from college in 1967, at which time college students were quite rare in China. This background offers me better education from my parents when I was a child, thus leads to my outstanding academic performance from primary school to university. I have always been in the top 10 since my first year of primary school, and this record remains to my college graduation. I attended the Chinese Physics Olympiad (Gruandong Province) in 1993, when I was in the last year of high-school, and achieved second prize. I was awarded Outstanding Graduates in 1998 by both the Ministry of Electronics Industry (PRC) and my college. My elder sister also benefits from the family background, and she is a post graduate from Zhongshan School of Medicine, Sun Yat-sen University, graduated in 2005. Though very successful in most time, there was one frustration. I graduated from high-school in 1994 and took Chinese College Entrance Examination the same year. According to the policy at that time we should apply to college for admission before taking the examination, and the decision will then be made based on the exam result. Based on my past performance, I applied to Peking University, one of the most famous university in China, for studying at their Electronics Engineering program. However the exam result of one course turned out to be unreasonably bad, for which I still do not know the reason, and I missed Peking University with only 7 points. My second application was made to Hangzhou Institute of Electronics Engineering (which is now Hangzhou Dianzi University) also for their Electronics Engineering program. As the Peking University required all their applicants to take an extra oral English test, and I got a good score at the test, teacher from HIEE offered me for Industrial Trade, which is basically an international trading major. I finally accepted this offer, otherwise I would not have the opportunity to go to college that year (we were only allowed to make two applications).

给中文学习者的一点小建议 Italki 对于世界各地的语言学习者而言是写作能力提升的绝佳平台。在这个社区呆了也有几个月了，看到许多中文学习者的小作文经常只是1-2句话，或者简单日常性文章。其实真正要提高写作水平需要设立一个主题，然后用母语想出进行翻译，然后利用baidu的搜索工具去搜索句子，然后与自己的句子进行对比，最后把最终的版本放到网上让母语者修改。这样对于你们的帮助时最大的，我们修改起来也比较有针对性。见缝插针似的学习虽然轻巧，但是对于语言能力的习得而言显得略具投机性。

Another Recommendation Letter I am kind of addicted to writing recommendation letters, which, in my opinion, is also an interesting way to improve my English writing skills. To Whom It May Concern: I am very pleased to have been asked to write this letter for XXX in support of his application for acceptance into your graduate school. I taught him Real Estate Evaluation when he was a junior. The course is one of the core curriculums and very applied, which introduces the practices and the framework of the property valuation model. XXX is the most active student in my class who was always well prepared and took a keen interest in our class discussions. Once I asked the students to analyze the advantages and disadvantages of different valuation methodologies, I was very impressed by his performance in the class. He carefully analyzed the forces influencing the value of a property, considering, for example, its environmental and physical characteristics, geographical location, and political regulations and concluded that, in the use of Comparative Method, the assumption that a property is worth what it will sell for is its biggest danger. More interestingly, he even used the principles he had learnt to value our library and shared the result with us. Because I specialize in real estate appraisal, he has often asked me questions on real estate investment. Making good use of his spare time, he has taken up some part-time job with some real estate company. Following my suggestions, in the winter of 2012, he worked for the China Construction & Development Company, one of the leading real estate developer in Mainland China and he has got involved in the various aspects of real estate development. Judging by what I know of him, I think XXX is fully qualified to pursue advanced studies in real estate in your university. I therefore strongly recommend him with enthusiasm. And I am sure that your distinguished program will help stand him in good stead in his future career.

Why I Chose My Major My interest in real estate can be traced back to the time when I helped my mom to manage one of her properties. The building (with both residential and commercial options) was primarily intended be used as rental property for investment purpose. In the course of managing more than 30 apartment units, I saw firsthand how well-organized property management can increases the value of a property, and hence increases its price. Actually, this property was later sold to a second-hand buyer with a very decent price and this was the time that I come to recognize the importance of the professional property management to the inner value of the real estate. Since then, my interest for real estate runs deeper and deeper through providing quality services for our tenants, be it through offering free Wi-Fi access, adding washer and dryer, or providing 24 hour security, and seeing more people move in. Indeed, it is through this combination of experiences that I have come to realize my life's ambition: to dedicate my life to real estate industry, and I will be able to offers my expertise in global property markets with my professional experience and market knowledge.

Social Skill or Good Qualification? In the world today, nothing is more important than the quality of one's education, especially when it comes to job, opportunities and even prosperity of a nation. However, as a qualified employee, decent education is not enough. Undoubtly, business today will hire wherever highly-trained or high-skilled workers are located, a case in this point is that over 60% of the new job in the coming decade will require more than a high school diploma. Furthermore, good qualifications which, in most case, means high level education is increasingly a prerequisite for the success and a predictor of the income that person will earn throughout her or his life. More importantly, it is exactly the skill you have learnt define your value to your employers. However, it is undeniable fact that social skills also play a critical role in personal fulfillment. For example, a salesman who has a Bachelor degree in marketing but not knowing how to get along with is customer will outcompete. Especially, schools today are also required to include social skills education into their curriculum. By contrary, teachers today, particularly in china , more teach to test but not the skill that prepare them to the career. Thus, subjects like history and philosophy which can cultivate personal social awareness are squeezed out. In summing up, employees with a good qualifications or education background are important for companies to gain an edge in global market, but what speak more to the long-term success to a business is the worker's social abilities.

Globalisation is a double-edge sword Some people think inviting foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries is helpful for improving local economy, while others believe that foreign companies should not be allowed to do so and local companies should be encouraged instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. nowdays, the globalisation is mainly driven by the force the expansion of the international bussiness.The foreign investment from developed countries somehow do contribute to the rise of the developing economies, which can be fully illustrated in the case of china. Though, if the local companies isn't get prepared for this , things will be slightly different. Indeed, inviting foreign factories to set up factories in developing countries can create more job opportunites for locals.By contrast, in the case of US, relatively poor manufactural strenght of the US should be partly responsible for the unployment crisis in America.what is more, the entrance of the foreign business can also fooster the cultural divisification, which is extremely important for improvement of a demoracy. local companies, however, if they are not mature enough to compete,failure in the local market won't be impossible.besides, bilatral relasionship is alway about doing trade and having culture exchange.economic friction between local companies and their foreign counterparts also fire the tensions between two sides. Thus, it is quite difficult the goverment to strike a balance in this process,considering rejection of the foreign companies may harm the activinessof its inner economy. To sum up, globalization is trend of the world which is hard to alter.In this process, The goverment should give more guidance to their own companies while introduce the high-end technology from freign conpanies to develope.

I would like to talk about cars. I like cars, because they are one of the thing that makes us go to a destination faster .But i haven't got a driving license. I plan to go abroad so I would probably get a license after I come back. my dad has a Toyota Highlander, it is a midsize crossover SUV . Its performance is excellent, and it is really fast . But i really don't think i can afford to buy a brand new car as a student, you know , the petrol , insurance , maintenance fees. If possible ,I would probably choose to buy a second-hand stang. If I could drive It would be more convenient to drivemyself than to take public transport, especially for traveling. It is always troublesome to find the route or bus number in a city which is totally new to you . In the case of driving , a gps device is almost everything I need. I prefer to travel with a friend . But if it doesn't happen then travelling alone would be the alternative . I don't like being in the car for too many hours at a time. It would be nice to stop off every hour for cup of tea or break.