Could someone help to review this essay? If possible score it in the terms of ielts. Thanks. TV programs aimed children play an important role in letting them relax and explore the world. Children can learn more effectively through watching TV because the visual contents are more direct and interesting. Some people argued that children should be encouraged to watch TV both at home and school. Personally, I don't agree with this opinion for a couple of reasons. First, Watching television for a long time could be harmful to children's physical and psychological health. Once they indulged into watching TV, they don't want to go outside and play games with their peers which are very important for their physical and mental development. Second, The contents that provided to children can stifle their creativity. For instance, if we want to teach a group of children how a pig eats food, we need to draw a simple cartoon pig first. Next time, when we ask the children to draw a pig, they probably draw the same thing they saw before instead of something they imagine out. Last, Children don't have the ability to cope with complex or adult information. They can be easily misled by the inappropriate content of TV shows. In conclusion, children could be allowed to watch some video courses to help them broaden their horizons at school and watch some children aimed programs at home for the purpose of relaxing and as a supplemental to the things they learn from school. But they need to be supervised by adults to watch television for a certain period and the programs they watching need to be filtered and selected by adults as well. Despite, watching TV can help them learn more effectively to some extent, they should not be allowed to watch TV in a frequent manner.

it is the first time I am trying to make an essay for practice. please correct me . tks in advance. Nowadays, along with the rising women right around the world, an increasing number of women are likely to attend to college to further their studying. Besides, some assert that universities should receive an identical number of male and female students in each subject. Personally, I totally disagree with this opinion for a couple of reasons. To begin with, the population of men and women are different in many countries and areas. In China, the number of men is about 20 million more than that of women, almost equal to the population of Australia, which means there are fewer female students than the number of the male.Therefore, Universities in China should reserve more seats for the male students rather than female. Secondly, boys and girls have different hobbies. Although, there are exceptions, generally, boys are more likely to be interested in science and girls in the opposite position are more likely to be interested in art. For example, in our computer science and technology faculty, the number of boys are four times than that of girls. So, our university should reserve more seats for boys in our faculty. Lastly, men and women have different natures which divide them to different fields naturally. Men are strong and rough while women are slender and tender which makes women be more acceptable by preschool kids. That is the reason why there is more women teacher in kindergarten than men teacher. In conclusion, universities should decide the number of the different genders of students carefully for each single subject based on multi factors, such as the local population and the different natures of men and women.