Corrected: Here is a photo of me and Autumn! I was happy to get the chance to hang out with her while I was in LA. I missed seeing you while I was there, but I am planning another trip to LA later this year. I would love to chat with you over a cup of coffee then if you are available! Shortened: Here is a photo of me and Autumn! I was happy to hang out with her while I was in LA but I missed seeing you! I'm planning another trip there later this year and would love to get a cup of coffee with you then if you're available There's no way to make it much shorter without losing your intentions!

Hi, Try this. ①Here is a photo of me and Autumn! I was happy to get the chance to hang out with her while I was in LA. I missed seeing her when I was in LA. But I am planning another trip to LA later this year. I would love to chat with her over a cup of coffee then if she is available! At the end of line one, you wrote her. So, I changed all of the "you" to her. Cheers