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A holiday A holiday is a nice opportunity for us to spend time together. We have been looking forward to the next holiday from the last one. The sea is our popular holiday destination. Every year we spend our vacation next to the sea. The warm sea, sand, and hot sun are favorite stuff during a holiday. We like swimming and sunbathing instead of looking at sights or walking. The reason our trip is the sea's temperature. Our kids like the warm sea when its temperature can reach 28-29 degrees. It's beautiful to look at them while they are splashing each other in the sea. We prefer to stay at a hotel rather than to rent apartments. A high rated hotel has everything needed for you. There're lots of prepared food, varied services, kid's animation and so forth. You don't need to think about your rest, because of everything around tunes on you. Rapturous yells your kids will prove it. We like when a hotel has a big green territory, and you can steadily enjoy it. The most vivid memories are when our children to have been сaptured on photos with their positive emotions. Every our holiday makes us closer each to other. For example, I never forgot the first holiday where we were resting with our little kid. I was bearing my kid during the holiday, he was always with me. After the holiday, we became really close to each other.
14 de jun. de 2019 12:05
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Vacation

Vacation is a nice opportunity for people to spend time together. We all look forward to going on one.
Places with beaches are always a popular destination. Every year my family and I spend our vacation by the sea. The warm sea, sand, and plenty of sunshine are my favorite during vacation. We prefer swimming and sunbathing to sightseeing and walking.
One of the reasons for our trip is the sea's temperature. Our kids like the warm water. It's beautiful to watch them splashing each other and swimming.
We like to stay at a hotel rather than rent an apartment. A high rated hotel has everything we need. There is lots of food, various services, programs for kids and so forth. You don't even have time to think about resting with all these things going on. Your kids' laughter and joy prove it.
We like it when a hotel has a big green area where we can enjoy ourselves. The most vivid memories are evoked by looking at the photos of our children having so much fun.
Our every vacation brings us closer to each other. For example, I will never forget the first vacation we had with our little kid. After the vacation, we became really close to each other.
14 de junio de 2019
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A holiday

A holiday is a nice opportunity for us to spend time together. We have been looking forward to the next holiday from the last one.
The sea is our popular holiday destination. Every year we spend our vacation next to the sea. The warm sea, sand, and hot sun are favorite stuff during a holiday. We like swimming and sunbathing instead of looking at sights or walking.
The reason for our trip is the sea's temperature. Our kids like the warm sea when its temperature can reach 28-29 degrees. It's beautiful to look at them while they are splashing each other in the sea.
We prefer to stay at a hotel rather than to rent apartments. A high rated hotel has everything needed for you. There're lots of prepared food, varied services, kid's animation and so forth. You don't need to think about your rest, because of everything around tunes on you. Rapturous yells of your kids will prove it.
We like when a hotel has a big green territory, and you can steadily enjoy it. The most vivid memories are when our children have been сaptured on photos with their positive emotions.
Every our holiday makes us closer to each other. For example, I never forgot the first holiday where we were resting with our little kid.
I was bearing my kid during the holiday, he was always with me. After the holiday, we have become really close to each other.

The essay is great. I made a few corrections.

After the word reason, use preposition for;
Rapturous yells of your kids-when you want to say that something ‘belongs’ to someone, you must use of. Check genitive case in English;

Do not use to in front of passive constructions in that context (have been captured).

Close to each other is a phrase (not each to other);

In the last sentence, I think Present Perfect is much better option because you are still close to each other :)

Hope this is helpful! Good luck :)
14 de junio de 2019
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