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We present you an eagle-shaped khomus. Khomus is in the shape of the head of an eagle. The Sakha people believe that the Eagle symbolizes the arrival of spring, warmth and sun. We have a very long and cold winter but when spring comes eagles fly first. This type of khomus is given especially to young men and men as a sign of power, courage and bravery. A khomus in the form of an eagle will give you strength and power. The free spirit of the eagle allows a person to express themselves, their strength and love of freedom. Suitable for a strong personality who isn’t satisfied with what has already been achieved. The pursuit of one’s goal is like the desire of eagles to rise higher.🦅 It was made by Innokenty Gotovtsev according to the proprietary technology. The material is stainless steel. The khomus has bright rich sound and wide range. The instrument is stored in an open wooden case.

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We present you an eagle-shaped khomus.

Khomus is in the shape of the head of an eagle. The Sakha people believe that the Eagle symbolizes the arrival of spring, warmth and sun. We have a very long and cold winter, but when spring comes, eagles fly first are the first to fly.
This type of khomus is given especially to young men and men as a sign of power, courage and bravery. A khomus in the form of an eagle will give you strength and power. The free spirit of the eagle allows a person to express themselves, their strength and love of freedom. Suitable for a strong personality who isn’t satisfied with what has already been achieved. The pursuit of one’s goal is like the desire of eagles to rise higher.🦅
It was made by Innokenty Gotovtsev according to the proprietary technology. The material is stainless steel. The khomus has a bright rich sound and wide range. The instrument is stored in an open wooden case.
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We present you an eagle-shaped khomus.

Khomus is in the shape of the head of an eagle.* The Sakha people believe that the Eagle** symbolizes the arrival of spring, warmth and sun. We have a very long and cold winter but when spring comes eagles fly first.
This type of khomus is given especially to young men and women as a sign of power, courage and bravery. A khomus in the form of an eagle will give you strength and power. The free spirit of the eagle allows a person to express themselves, their strength and love of freedom. Suitable for a strong personality who isn’t satisfied with what has already been achieved. The pursuit of one’s goal is like the desire of eagles to rise higher.🦅
It was made by Innokenty Gotovtsev according to the proprietary technology. The material is stainless steel. The khomus has bright rich sound and wide range. The instrument is stored in an open wooden case.

*Если это не продложение какой-то другой статьи, стоит указать, что такое Кхомус, иначе это скорее ошибка. В этой фоме предложение сейчас значит Кхомус(как знак, или значение) - в самой форме головы орла. Звучит странно, особенно если учесть что дальше Кхомус дается молодым людям как что-то физическое :)
**Если это не особенный,единственный орел, то орел может быть с маленькой буквы и с неопределенным артиклем.
Я бы еще немножко досвязал текст, потому что пока он выглядит как набор предложений. Но в целом отличная работа! Так держать :)

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