First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am （來自） from China. My name is Lynn, but （但） you can call me H ,that is （是） my nickname.
I am a nice girl.I like reading ,music,traveling and so on.I am a purchaser,working in a factory.I want to learn more English for communicating with others.I think English is beautiful language （語）.I hope I can express myself oneday.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I come from China.My name is Lynn.Also you can call me H ,that  is  my nickname.
I am a nice girl.I like reading ,music,traveling and so on.Now I am a purchaser,working in a factory.I want to learn more English form communicating with others.I think English is beautiful.I hope I can express myself oneday.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I from China.My name is Lynn.Also you can call me H ,that my nickname.
I am a nice girl.I like reading ,music,traveling and so on.Now I am a purchaser,working in a factory.I want to learn more English for communicating with others.I think English is beautiful.I hope I can express myself oneday.

Ditto, watch your verb 'be'.

I come from China, I'm from China. That is my nickname.

I want to learn my English better, I want to improve my English for... (alt: to communicate with/to others. )

If you want to emphasize the 'language', you need an article: English is a beautiful language.

Maybe 'express myself in English', yes?