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Have you seen a movie called "Maurice"? Life is easy lately, I started to watch movie again. Usually at night after I get off work. There are science fiction films I always loved such as "Thor :The Dark World", but I found the love story still is the one that can move me easily. Such as Maurice. It's a love story between two men that happened in early 20th-century England, filmed year of 1987. Maurice and Clive fall in love in university, but Clive so afraid to loose the social status,reputation and career so he give up this relationship with Maurice and married with a girl and leave Maurice in struggle, Servant Alec sensed Maurice's lonely and confusion and comfort him. Forgive my clumsy language skills, the movie itself is much better.I love the emotional expression of this movie.

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Have you seen a the movie called "Maurice"?

 

 

Life is easy lately. I started to watching movies again. Usually at night, right after I get off work.
There are science fiction films ones that I always loved such as "Thor :The Dark World". but Still I found the find love stories still is the one that can move me easily. Such as a one is Maurice. [you can also use italics for titles]


It's a love story between two men that happened took place in early 20th-century England. filmed year of It was made/produced in 1987.

 

Maurice and Clive fell in love when they were studying in the university. but Clive so was afraid to loose the his social status,reputation and career bearing that so he gave up this relationship forgo his love with Maurice and married with a girl. and leave Maurice was left in his struggles. His servant, Alec sensed Maurice's his master's loneliness and confusion sorrow.  and Soon he began to comfort him... 


Forgive my clumsy language skills. The movie expresses itself is much better than I.__I love simply adore how the emotions expression of are protrayed by this movie.

 

Now you are getting me curious... I shall look up this movie for more details.  Thanks.

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Some of Jeff's corrections are OK, but there are some grammar, syntax, and construction errors. I don't think English is his first language. Let me pick my way through a few points where you and he need guidance.

Your title 'Have you seen a movie called "Maurice"?' is actually OK. In this context, asking about a movie, you might hear either 'a movie' or 'the movie', with the latter being slightly more common. If you are unsure of the title, 'a movie' would be better.  If you are in the middle of a discussion about movies, then you would simply say 'Have you seen 'Maurice' '.

Yours: 'Life is easy lately, I started to watch movie again. Usually at night after I get off work. '

Jeff did not correct the main error here, that being the dependent clause 'Usually at night after I get off work' -- which cannot stand as a sentence, even with the words he added. It is true that your 'Life is easy lately, I started to watch movie again ' is incorrect because you are joining two independent clauses (sentences) with only a comma -- you must use a 'joining' word. However, I would not break it into two sentences as he did because the second part is a direct result the first part. Here is one possible correction:

'Life is easy lately, so I have started to watch movies again, usually at night after work.' (The verb form 'have started to watch' implies an action that is continuing at the present time.)

Jeff's: 'There are science fiction films ones that I always loved such as "Thor :The Dark World".'

His use of the word 'ones' tells me English is probably a second language for him because it is a mistake many foreign speakers make, most often in the phrase 'these ones' (we just say 'these'). You can say 'ones' if you are talking about digits, e.g. 'My passport number contains 5 ones' ... or ... 'When the judges rated her performance, how many ones and twos did she score?'  So I prefer to keep your word 'films' and keep Jeff's 'that I always love', adding a comma:

'There are science fiction films that I always love, such as "Thor: The Dark World".'

(Note the corrected spacing of the colon punctuation mark after 'Thor'.)

Jeff's correction of the next two sentences has some awkward syntax, and again a misuse of 'one' in 'Such a one is Maurice.'  The syntax there would have to be 'One such movie is Maurice.'  Your form 'Such as Maurice' is not a sentence -- no verb. You could say 'Such is Maurice.'  and have a valid sentence (just as in the old saying 'Such is life.'). One way to rework those two sentences:

'However, I have found that love stories can still easily move me, as told in the movie Maurice.'


As you can see, corrections of construction and syntax often require explanation, if the student is to get the full benefit.  Knowing why the change is made is often critical to understanding.   If you want to go over the rest of the writing, catch me on skype or QQ sometime soon. We can more easily voice chat about it as I text you some suggestions.

 

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