would you correct my poem?
Do you know where the waves came from?
Do you know where the wind comes from?
It seams that heaven has no end...
Stars look at all the land...
The waves are coming coming coming..
Like all these thoughts into your head..
Or maybe flower through the snow
Who makes it warm and strong?
How can be such a power,,be hidden in that flower..
It's tenderness has no compare...
The colores mixed in it so well..
To be continued. ..
Thank you so much...
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Do you know where the waves came from? Do you know where the wind comes from? It seems that heaven has no end... Stars look at all the land... The waves are coming coming coming.. like all these thoughts into your head.. Or maybe flower through the snow Who makes it warm and strong? How can be such a power,,be hidden in that flower.. Its tenderness has no compare... The colours mixed in it so well.. To be continued. .. Thank you so much...
Very nice! I liked how the slow, flowy sentences matched the subject matter.
I changed the L to lowercase because it makes it one broken sentance. This way, the waves are coming like thoughts. It's not incorrect though. If you prefer the two concepts separate, feel free to keep it capitalised!
The corrections others were possible misspellings.
You might consider experimenting with line breaks as an additional form of punctuation.
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True poetry has been written with somewhat strange ideas of grammar but it has to have meaning if only to the writer. Some poetry contains rhyming words or expressive or descriptive words. Nature or love are quite common themes as they involve quite strong emotion. Nice poem and as was stated only a couple of spelling errors but nothing considerable.
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Thank you so much to you all. I will keep writing
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The waves are coming coming coming..
Like all these thoughts into your head.. best part well done
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Very nice. It's a poem; it's not meant to have good grammar ;-)
A couple of spelling mistakes:
It seams: it seems. It's tenderness: no apostrophe - Its tenderness. Colores = colours, or colors if you want to learn American.
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