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Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. 20180818 Singapore The relative importance of career development and relationships with family or friend is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to plan their daily schedule. This essay will discuss both sides, and then explain why I am more inclined to prioritize time with friends and family. On the one hand, people who manage time by prioritizing career development claim that dedication to job can improve their life quality. The primary reason is that the more time they spend for their job, the higher possibility to get a promotion, followed by increasing salaries. With more money can be allocated, their basic needs for food and sheltering can be satisfied, coupled with the higher affordability concerning their pastime. Every minute they spend for work could be traded off for better living condition. For example, they do not need to share a tiny room with others because of tight budget, and they can treat themselves a feast of sumptuous food after work, if they can receive decent salaries. However, people who prioritize time with friends and family live a more emotionally satisfying life. Unlike their hard work for job, which not always paid off, their relationship with family and friends can be directly improved if more time are spent with each other, this is the most effective way to gain acceptance and satisfy one’s emotional needs. In addition, the support from family or friends plays a significant role in motivating people to move towards his goals steadily. They may offer emotional and material supports to those who meet troubles and back them up. In conclusion, although dedicating more time on work may contribute to improvement of people’s living standard, I believe time should be rather spent on accompanying with family and friends, because they are the most powerful supporters that carry us to overcome the trouble and make us feel more happier.

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Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
20180818 Singapore
The relative importance of career development and relationships with family or friends, is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to plan their daily schedule. This essay will discuss both sides, and then explain why I am more inclined to prioritize time with friends and family.
On the one hand, people who manage time by prioritizing career development claim that dedication to their job can improve their life quality. The primary reason is that the more time they spend for at their job, the higher the possibility of getting to get a promotion, followed by an increase in salary. With more money can be allocated, their basic needs for food and sheltering can be satisfied, coupled with the higher affordability more to spend on/a higher disposable income to spend on concerning their pastimes/hobbies
Every minute they spend for at work could they believe will equate to be traded off for better living conditions. For example, they do not need to share a tiny room with others because of a tight budget, and they can treat themselves to a feast of sumptuous food after work, if they can receive decent salaries. 
However, people who prioritize time with friends and family live a more emotionally satisfying life. Unlike their hard work for a job, which will not always pay off, their relationships with family and friends can be directly improved if more time are is spent with eachther, this is the most effective way to gain acceptance and satisfy one’s emotional needs. In addition, the support from family or friends plays a significant role in motivating people to move towards his their goals steadily. They may offer emotional and material supports to those who meet encounter troubles and back them up. 

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