Hey עינב, great job on the essay. I’ve heard many great things about Kibbutzim from my Hebrew teacher and friends. It sounds really interesting. I put (…) because you used the word “between” so you need to put another word in contrast of “quiet”. So maybe you could say “good balance between quiet and crowded” or anything else you’d like to express. I hope this helps 😊 if you need more help with English, feel free to check my profile out ✌🏼

Hey I’ve heard of a Kibbutz before! Sounds like an amazing place. I’m not sure of what your actual balance is supposed to mean though that’s the best correction we have! Note the use of apostrophe’s to show the missing letter in the contraction :)