Can you check the below paragrphy for me? thanks a lot
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform that I lost my bag in your cinema on July 6th (last night) when I was there to see the movie of “the Adventure”.

If I remember well I was sitting on the seat of number six of the row 11. It didn’t take it with me when I left the cinema due to my carelessness. It was a black leather hand bag with a little flower logo embossed on the bottom of the right side of the bag. The brand of the bag called “MADI”. There are several things in the bag: a small red wallet with around 150$ in it, one black note book and a cosmetic bag.

I would appreciate so much if you can search the area and check out for me. You can contact me with below number if you have any news.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

With Many thanks!

Question

Can you check the below paragrphy for me? thanks a lot
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform that I lost my bag in your cinema on July 6th (last night) when I was there to see the movie of “the Adventure”.

If I remember well I was sitting on the seat of number six of the row 11. It didn’t take it with me when I left the cinema due to my carelessness. It was a black leather hand bag with a little flower logo embossed on the bottom of the right side of the bag. The brand of the bag called “MADI”. There are several things in the bag: a small red wallet with around 150$ in it, one black note book and a cosmetic bag.

I would appreciate so much if you can search the area and check out for me. You can contact me with below number if you have any news.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

With Many thanks!

Answer

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you that I lost my bag in your cinema on July 6th (last night) when I was there to watch the movie “the Adventure”. I was sitting on seat number six on row 11. In fact, I forgot it on the seat. It was a black leather hand bag with a little flower logo embossed on the bottom right side of the bag. The brand of the bag is “MADI”. There are several things in the bag: a small red wallet with around 150$ in it, one black note book and a cosmetic bag. I would appreciate so much if you can search the area and check out for me. You can contact me on the number mentioned below if you have any news. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely,

Answer

Dear Sir,
 I am writing to inform you that I lost my bag in your cinema on July 6th (last night) when I was there to watch the movie “the Adventure”. I was sitting on seat number six on row 11. In fact, I forgot it on the seat. It was a black leather hand bag with a little flower logo embossed on the bottom right side of the bag. The brand of the bag is “MADI”. There are several things in the bag: a small red wallet with around 150$ in it, one black note book and a cosmetic bag. I would appreciate so much if you can search the area and check out for me. You can contact me on the number mentioned below if you have any news. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely,

Answer

Dear Sir,
I am writing to inform you that I lost my bag in your cinema on July 6th (last night) when I was there to watch the movie  “the Adventure”.

I was sitting on  seat  number six on  row 11. In fact, I forgot it on the seat. It was a black leather hand bag with a little flower logo embossed on the bottom  right side of the bag. The brand of the bag is “MADI”. There are several things in the bag: a small red wallet with around 150$ in it, one black note book and a cosmetic bag.

I would appreciate so much if you can search the area and check out for me. You can contact me on the number mentioned below if you have any news.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,

Answer

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