Help correct my short story translation
Hello everyone!
I'm a new iTalki user learning Chinese. I have translated a children's short story from a book "365 Bed Time Stories", but would like some feedback on my translations. I don't think my translation skills are very good yet!
The original story can be seen here: https://www.dropbox.com/s/8kj4ri91rs7h7gi/Story.jpg?dl=1
My translation is as follows;
Title: New Year Baby
Original Work by BÄo LÄi
Pictures by ZhÄng ChÄ
1: Obviously, it is very good to be gazing out the window
2: New Year Baby riding the red carp has come
3: Happy New Year!
4: Carp spits out of his mouth a New Year's Present
5: New Year Baby has flown away
6: Obviously, it is very good to fly out the window
7: They are riding a white cloud to chase after New Year Baby
8: They are at the white cloud and have fallen asleep
9: They woke up to find they were in bed
10: They under their pillow then discovered a wrapped present
11: It turns out, the present was the first part of "365 Bed Time Stories"Hi everyone! I'm so sorry - I didn't realise that link wouldn't work for friends in China. I couldn't see how to add a picture directly to my post. Please try this link instead: http://clsnoswell.com/6d298949-12d5-435d-a41f-00e3024b1eeb/Story.jpg Thank you!
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Respuestas · 11
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ïŒ"ææ"&"äœłäœł"are both people's names.
1: Obviously, it is very good to be gazing out the window
â"Mingming and Jiajia are gazing out the window."
6: Obviously, it is very good to fly out the window
â "Mingming and Jiajia fly out the window,too."
ïŒ(1)"ä»ä»Źćšæ怎äžćç°"means "they discovered something which is under their pillow"instead"they under their pillow".
(2)"ć
"is a quantifier of the present.
10: They under their pillow then discovered a wrapped present
âThey discovered the present under their pillow.
(I use "the present" because this present is the one be gaved by New Year Baby)
ïŒ"éš"is a quantifier of the book.
11: It turns out, the present was the "365 Bed Time Stories"
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â» Pictures by ZhÄng JĆ«n(you mixed 蜊(chÄ) with ć(JĆ«n)).
â» "ææ" and "äœłäœł" are the two children's names, named "Mingming" and "Jiajia" respectively.
â» Pay attention to the verb's tense. Once, "They are riding a white cloud to chase after New Year Baby", and then, "They woke up to find they were in bed".
â» â(äž)ć
â and "äžéš" are both quantifier which modify the nouns behind them, "瀌ç©" and â365ć€æ
äșâ respectively. âäžć
â means "a pack of things"; âäžéšâ here means "a book named something" or "a book of the ...."
10. They discovered that pack of present under their pillow.
11. It turned out that the present was a book of the "365 Bed Time Stories".
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The link works now.
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Hello! I have added another link - please try that one and let me know if it works.
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In fact, you can also post the picture under the text.
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