Grammatically it is OK, however semantically it is too condensed and not normal usage. Better is: "Presentations that are read from a script (or "read verbatim") will receive a deduction in the final score (or "mark").

Which one is the right?

As a slogan on a poster I would prefer "SUCCESS: it is how hard work is named", or "SUCCESS: that is how hard work is named"

As a sentence in an essay I would prefer: "Success is how hard work is named."

In Spanish, as you know, often "it" is not expressed, and in general Spanish is a "pro-drop" language, but English is decidedly less so. Re-using the pronoun in the first example to stand again for the antecedent "success" makes it more emphatic. In the second instance, we are only defining the word "success" as you see it.

So... the short answer is that it depends on context, and these two examples are not really clear cut. However, discounting exceptional cases, English does not usually drop the subject of a sentence. So if you require a neuter pronoun, use "it" in place of a known antecedent. "I have a car." "It is red." We cannot use only "Is red." for the second sentence.

1.) You must know the grammar of Spanish (your mother tongue). If you have not studied it, do that first before learning the grammar of a foreign language. 2.) The best book is one that is available to you in your local librería o biblioteca. But If you can order by mail then... 3.) Murphy's for a grammar written in inglés, or "Gramática De La Lengua Inglesa"/Taylor en español.

La costa ha visto los efectos del turismo de masa [de la gente] en los últimos veinte años. Nos exigió repetir la frase una y otra vez/muchas veces.

"Would" can be construed as a subjunctive form which express inherent doubt. So your first sentence connotes that you may or may not do the action contemplated. The second sentence, "will" is indicative future, and specifies what will happen. In other words, there is little doubt that the action will be realized. And since you question the finer points of these verbs, why not take the opportunity to clean up your orthography. Poor orthography always reflects negatively on the author, even more so than semantics. This is because orthography is taught from age 8 up, so it is considered a fundamental skill. Whereas in some cases, the semantics you question can rise to the university level. "I thought I would keep my closest family members, and get rid of the ones I don't really talk to, like people I met for one or two dates." [Cleaned orthography, use more conventional phrasing]

To me "[people] are socialized in different ways" typically is used to mean that people are socialized differently developmentally, rather than that they "play different social roles in the society". So for example, humor that appeals to a certain cultural group may not appeal to another, or that humor that is targeted to a certain class of people may not appeal to another. It is not dependent on their role in society, rather their upbringing and peer group. [Humor or "humour" as you spell it]

Mr. Yan is one of the musical performers of contemporary China, who DURING AN EARLIER PERIOD did AN art exchange with western countries. As early as 1980s, he held the “Yan Shou Ping Peking Opera VIOLIN Symphony Concert” in Beijing, ushering IN the musical performance BY combining THE Peking Opera VIOLIN with western musical instruments.

With this in mind, in 1998, he was planning to establish a Peking Opera troupe, which consisted OF the idea of Mr. Yan Shou’ping, the Peking Opera FIRST VIOLINIST-or-CONCERTMASTER, FOCUSING on THE Peking Opera's study and talent cultivation. A "fiddle" is not an instrument used in an orchestra, it is called a "violin". When asked what is the difference between a fiddle and a violin, the standard response is, "The nut at the end of the bow." That is a word-play, which indicates that the player is the only difference.