Jessie💞Isabella
Usually, I don’t eat dinner, but today was an exception. This afternoon my parents prepared dinner for my daughter, which consisted of chicken soup, meat balls filled in bitter melon segments, green vegetables, and rice. They put it in several lunch boxes and carried them over to our apartment. However, when my father got here, my daughter had already come home from school and gone to bed, because she was very tired and sleepy then. Thus, we had to put her dinner away and waited for her to wake and get up to eat. However, by 10 p.m., she was still sleeping soundly. So I supposed that she would keep sleeping until tomorrow morning. I didn’t want to waste food, especially I knew my parents put a lot of efforts in it, so I ate it all. Right after I finished dinner, my daughter woke up!
2023年3月9日 15:11
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I don’t usually eat dinner, but today was an exception. This afternoon my parents prepared dinner for my daughter, consisting of chicken soup, meat balls filled with bitter melon segments, green vegetables, and rice. They put the dinner in several lunch boxes and brought them over to our apartment. However, when my father arrived, my daughter had already come home from school and gone to bed. She was very tired. So, we put her dinner away and waited for her to wake up to eat. By 10 p.m. however, she was still sleeping. I figured that she would continue to sleep until morning and I didn’t want to waste food. Especially since my parents had put a lot of effort into it. So I ate all of it. Right after I finished, my daughter woke up!
I did a bit more editing than others. Some of the sentences are too long but understandable.
2023年3月10日
Usually, I don’t eat dinner, but today was an exception. This afternoon my parents prepared dinner for my daughter, which consisted of chicken soup, meat balls filled with bitter melon segments, green vegetables, and rice. They put it in several lunch boxes and carried them over to our apartment. However, when my father got here, my daughter had already come home from school and gone to bed, because she was very tired and sleepy. Thus, we had to put her dinner away and waited for her to wake and get up to eat. However, at 10 p.m., she was still sound asleep. So I supposed that she would keep sleeping until tomorrow morning. I didn’t want to waste food, especially as I knew my parents had put a lot of effort into it, so I ate it all. Right after I finished dinner, my daughter woke up!
Poor Isabella!
2023年3月10日
I don’t usually eat dinner, but today was an exception. This afternoon my parents prepared dinner for my daughter, consisting of chicken soup, meat balls filled with bitter melon segments, green vegetables, and rice. They put it in several lunch boxes and brought them over to our apartment. However, when my father got here, my daughter had already come home from school and gone to bed, because she was very tired. So we put her dinner away and waited for her to wake up and come to eat. However, by 10 p.m., she was still sleeping soundly. So I supposed that she would keep sleeping until tomorrow morning. I didn’t want to waste any food, especially since I knew that my parents had put a lot of effort into preparing it, so I ate it all myself. And then, wouldn't you know it, right after I finished dinner, my daughter woke up!
The only grammar error in your version was "filled in" whereas I think you want "filled with". All the other changes are not grammatically necessary, but they make it a little more idomatic. I hope that is helpful!
2023年3月10日
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