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My Homework Please help me correct it ^.^ It is a common law around the world that people over 60 or 65 must retire and made room for the younger generation. People who oppose this law claim that it is not humanitarian to force the old to retire if they have great affection for their jobs. However, looking from the big picture, we have to acknowledge that this law do make sense. First, people who has already stepped into old age is no longer fit for the job physically and mentally. Their movements will be slowed down uncontrollably so that they work they can do will be limited. It is difficult for them to guarantee the quality of their work for their reaction is not as swift as it used to be. Second, since more and more young prople graduate from school, the job demands will soar. The old have to make room for these new blood flowing into the society. Making room for young people is not only because they need a chance to make a living but also because the company needs these engergetic and ambitious people to lead it into the current trend and create more values. People over 60 or 65, no matter in Asia or western countries, cannot resist the trend to give way to younger generation, because the old are no longer fit for the job while the young are ready to lead a new world.
2012年4月4日 15:35
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Correct this entry?  It's too long and there are too many mistakes to correct it completely so I will begin with formatting.  Pay attention to the details regarding formatting; a blank line separates paragraphs.  The big mistake which is many is vocabulary.  Who wrote this entry?  You?  Microsoft Word or Google?  The vocabulary is really streching the meanings of many words and to completely correct this entry we must use better vocabulary word by word.  I suggest you do that yourself first and then resubmit.  You are also having trouble with the verbs, if you make mistakes with the irregular verbs others will have trouble understanding you and understanding is the bottom line when it comes to language. 

 

Your argument must be on every school's curriculum this year, other students are arguing the same question or present situation in China.  Please make sure about your facts before wielding them as the truth - any student would fall on their head in life if they tried.   

2012年4月4日
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