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Weather Whether college students should be required to attend classes has always been an issue in dispute and sound reasons for and against can be sufficientlay provided by both sides. People who favor students’ attending compulsively compulsory attendance insist that it can ensure the students’ safety??? and yield a good environment to for study, while the ones those who prefer offering students greater autonomy argue that the above points sound weak and the students have the ability to be safe??? and self-controlled. Based on my understanding, it will be more reasonable if schools could grant the students freedom to choose weather whether to attend classes themselves independently, which will be as demonstrated in illustrated from the following two paragraphs aspects,

Firstly, college students have their own judgement on <em>weather </em>the classes they are attending will contribute to their future development. After all, they are grown-ups legally speaking and most of them already have their ambitious goals. In this sense, some unnecessary classes certainly will occupy much of their time and block their road toward the objectives destinations. Specifically speaking, it seems as though like that someone who has the a gift for painting, however he/she has to be bound up in may be compelled to attend medicine classes. Everyone has his/her their limitations, there is no need to cultivate too many 'Jack of all trades and master of none', which seems to be is exactly the least the precisely the minimum expectation of Chinese society wants.

Secondly, some classes are too boring and monotonous to inspire students’ creativity, thus more and more students choose self study. One the one hand, of course all the teachers are qualified enough to teach students knowledge, but how to put??? present/deliver it effectively is another skill. It is a pity that the public often overlook the significances of the student-teacher interaction process. On the other hand, there even exists a phenomenon that some teachers are relutanctly arranged compelled to teach something which is outside their beyond his/her professional field. As a result, no matter how terrific the teacher may be, it is impossible for the class atmosphere to be wonderful. Thus, forcing the students to attend the classes is mainly palliatives token and make no sense at all.

To sum up, it is more practical to allow the students to attend attending classes voluntarily. Though it may cause some inconvenience for the school or some other students, the advantages are far outweigh the disadvantages  bad ones. From the perspective of the maximising students’ potential being maximized and cultivating more professional talents being cultivated, we can see that attending classes selectively will help students to learn better.

To sum In summing up, it is more practical to allow the students attending classes voluntarily or not. [Now I think you are talking about the system in whether students can choose their own core subjects and electives more than attending class or not.] In the end, the emphasis is that whether they can pass the finals or not!. Though it may cause some inconvenince for the school or some other students, the advantages are far outweigh the bad ones. From the perspective of the students’ protential being maxomized and more professional talents being cultivated, we can see that attending classes selectively will help students to learn better.[You are repeating and not contributing anythine new to the essay].

I believe you are talking about the Chinese college system in which students are not allow to choose and pick like the the US education.  There are mandatory subjects in which the student must take to ensure the degree is valid.  Then there are electives in which the student may take. These may be related to their field or not. Therefore to an English speaker, the reasons for not attending college classes physically is akin to attending classes in a non-tertiary school system.  Therefore your reasoning is weak.

Secondly, some classes are too boring and monotonous to inspire students’ creativity, thus more and more students choose self study. [Not good enough a reason.  Learning the multiplication tables is extremely boring but one must learn it in order to progress higher levels]

In this reason, the problem lies not with the students but those professors.  Some classes are boring because the professors don't know how to teach.  They may posses the knowledge and numerous awards.  However, this does not mean they can teach.  They only transmit what they know.  Remember, they are not called teachers but professors!  Then there are some professors who are forced by the higher ups to teach beyond their capability or in a field that they are not specialized in.  You can't ask someone in the electrical field to teach hydrology!  However, this is another story.  If the "top is crooked, don't expect the lower to be straight".  Palliating in the end does no one any good, students or professors.

One the one hand, of course all the teachers are qualified enough to teach students knowledge, but how to put it effectively is another skill. It is a pity that the public often overlook the significances of the interaction process. On the other hand, there even exists a phenomenon that some teachers are relutantly arranged to teach something which is beyong his/her professional field. As a result, no matter how terrific the teacher may be, it is improssible for the class atmosphere to be wonderful. Thus, forcing the students to attend the classes is mainly palliatives and make no sense at all. 

Firstly, College students have their should be matured enough to have their own judgement on weather the classes they are attending will contribute to their future development  whether or not attending the class will affect their academic lives adversely. After all, they are grown-ups in the legally and most of them already have their ambitious goals sense. They can decide for themselves which class will benefit them in obtaining their degree.  In this sense, some unnecessary classes certainly will occupy much of their time and block their road toward the destinations. An art class may enchance his life in general but it does not much in helping him in his field of medicine.  Students should be able to choose what core courses or electives to take.  Specifically speaking, it seems like that one has the gift for painting, however he/she has to be bound up in medicine classes. Everyone has his/her limitation, there is no need to cultivate too many Jack of all trades and master of one, which is exactly the least the Chinese society wants. [Long winded, repetitive and obvious.  Better to use the space to booster your reasoning.] Not everyone can be a Leonardo da Vinci, a master of everything he touches.  Some are born with an innate ability, while others struggle years to achieve.  Shoving everything deemed good down a person's throat, in the end makes him a Jack of all trades and a master of none.  I believe that the powers to be are faulty in their thinking of making a society so homogenously.

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Weather Whether college students should be required to attend classes or not, has always been an issue in dispute and sound reasons can be sufficientlay provided by a controversy.  Both sides proclaim their reasons for the pro and cons. People who Those favoring students’ attending attendance, insisted compulsively insist that it can ensure the students’ safety and yield a good environment to study, [wrong choice of words and logic] will learn better.  If not, what is the use of having professors around.  while the ones who prefer offering students On the other side, having greater autonomy argue that the above points sound weak and the students have the ability to be safe and self-controlled mean that students will need to learn to discipline themselves.  Being in the classroom does not guarantee that they will learn. Based on my understanding In my opinion, it will be more reasonable if school could grant the students have the freedom to choose if weather [weather = 天氣] to they attend classes independently, which will be illustrated from the following two aspects, on their own.  The following are my two reasons.

Difference between "if" and weather:

If you use "whether" you must provide a constrast, simile connected by "OR"

Whether you like it OR not, you will have to do it. 

Whether you are the king OR a commoner, all are subject to the common law.

Whether your skin is white, black OR any other color, we are all human beings".

In using "if", you do not have to provide one.  

If you like it, then do it.

If you don't like it, then don't do it.

If you are a king, you will be still subject to the common law.

Even if your skin is blue, you are still considered a human being, that is if you look like one.