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A joke--english-chinese bilingual My daughter asked my wife:"mom, why is it that grown-ups start telling story always with 'long long time ago.'" With a reproachful glance look at me, she said:" not everyone do it like that, someone usually starts with 'Sorry, I'm too busy at work today, so I come home late.‘” 女儿问老婆:“妈妈,为什么大人讲故事,每次都要从‘很久很久以前……’开始?” 老婆看了我一眼,回答说:“不是每个人都爱这样开始讲故事的,有人一讲故事就从‘今天工作实在太忙,所以回来晚了……’开始。”
2010年12月31日 11:45
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A  Joke

My daughter asked my wife:"Mom, why is it that grown-ups start<strike> telling </strike>stories<strike> always </strike>with 'A long long time ago.'"
With a reproachful glance (my wife?  my daughter?) looked at me, <strike>she </strike>said, " Not everyone does that, some people <strike>usually</strike> start<strike>s</strike> with "Sorry, I'm too busy at work today, so I got home late.‘”

Ha ha.  Funny story. 

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2011年1月1日
这个很经典啊~~
2010年12月31日
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