My first day at school It was a day I will never forget. Although it has passed 14 years, but I can recollect all the happenings on that day. It was a day in September 2000, my father took me to schoo

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My first day at school It was a day I will never forget. Although it has passed 14 years, but I can recollect all the happenings on that day. It was a day in September 2000, my father took me to school on the road, where me friends and I often hung out. But on that day, it was a little change. The wind flow made me felt cold, I still didn't where I was going to. In school, I saw a lot of boys and girls liked me and their parents were standing in front of the school yard. There was a while, then I was taken in to the class room. At the initial time, the class was so noisy indeed, after a moment, my teacher have kept us in discipline. We had no lesson on first, we started studying on the second day. I was really happy to be in my school for the first time, it was a unforgettable day.

2015年2月5日 15:55

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Native Speakers! Please look at this again ;)

My first day at school

It was a day I will never forget. Although it has passed 14 years but I can recollect all the happenings from that day. It was a day in September 2000 when my father took me to school on the road, where my friends and I often hung out. But on that day it was a little change different. The wind flow made me feel cold and I still didn't know where I was going to. In school I saw a lot of boys and girls, liked me, and their parents were standing in front of the school yard. There was It took a while but then I was taken into the classroom. At the initial time/beginning the class was so noisy indeed but after a moment my teacher has kept us in discipline*. At the first day we had no lesson, on first. ee started studying on the second day. I was really happy to be in my school for the first time. It was a unforgettable day.

*not sure if this one is right^^
Also I am not absolutely sure about the comma placement even though I know for sure that you used too many of them^^