Which sounds better? 1 or 2 1. To mitigate the risk of project failure due to tool unavailability, the availability of all required tools should be ensured early on prior to project implementation to

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Which sounds better? 1 or 2 1. To mitigate the risk of project failure due to tool unavailability, the availability of all required tools should be ensured early on prior to project implementation to allow time for finding alternative approaches should the need arise. 2. Ensuring that all the required tools are available prior to implementation would reduce the risk of tool unavailability and give space to alternative approaches mitigating the risk of project failure.

2015年4月18日 17:23

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It is someone's thesis I am editing for them -

2015年4月18日

1. Sounds like a god damn rocket scientist! Haha, it seemed fine, but it has a huge risk of sounding unnatural, and people not understanding what you mean. 2. Sounds very professional, and I'd use it over 1, until you hit the word "mitigating". Mitigating isn't a commonly used word in common the english language, for most of us at least.

2015年4月18日

もっと早く上達したいですか？

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