First notebook entry: Introducing myself

hello，everyone~
I'm shirley from China.I have graduated from university for nearly two years.
Now,I am working in a concert hall, taking charge of demestic and foreign performing programs.I enjoy my work very much which provides me with precious opportunity to enjoy classic music and have access to meet word-class musicians.
I hope to futher improved my English in italki community! Wishing a perfect experience to study and communicate with you all!~~~
Hello everyone,
I'm Shirley from China.  Having graduated from college nearly two years ago, I am now working at a concert hall, taking charge of domestic and foreign performances.  I thoroughly enjoy my work, which provides a priceless opportunity to enjoy classical music which meeting world class musicians.
I hope to continually improve my English through the italki community!  Here's to wishing for the perfect learning experience and future communications with you all.

(I don't know where this all began . . . . I see Chinese put a common after "Hi" or "Hello".  This is grammatically incorrect.  "University" might be a British usage, but in the US, we say "college", reserving university for those institutions which have more than 5 schools.  The last sentence is written in the declarative case, like a toast - so I added a "Here's to . . ."

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

hello，everyone~
I'm shirley from China.
My name is shirley,I from China.

I have graduated from university for nearly two years.
I graduated  from university almost two years.

Now,I am working in a concert hall, taking charge of demestic and foreign performing programs.
Currently,I work in a concert hall,and I manage domestic and foreign performances.

I enjoy my work very much which provides me with precious opportunity to enjoy classic music and have access to meet word-class musicians.
I enjoy my work very much which provides me with precious opportunities to enjoy classical music ,
and have access to meet world-class musicians.

I hope to futher improved my English in italki community!
I hope to further improve my English in italki community!

Wishing a perfect experience to study and communicate with you all!~~~
Wishing a perfect experience of study and communicate with you

Ps:Well,you have a good job^ ^

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

hHello，everyone~
I'm shirley from China. I have graduated from university for nearly two years ago.
Now,I am working in a concert hall, taking charge of demestic domestic and foreign performing performance programs. I enjoy my work very much which provides me with a precious opportunity to enjoy classical music and have access to meet word-class musicians.
I hope to futher improved my English in the italki community! Wishing for a perfect experience to study and communicate with you all!~~~

You wrote this very well. Please dont forget to use spaces after commas and full stops and to use capitals at the start of a sentence.

Your job sounds amazing 如果你遇到王力宏告诉他我爱她， 哈哈哈哈！