Children's Summer Vacation Life(please help me to correct it, thank you so much)
Every summer vacation, there are special children who leave their school and hometown to around their parents. Dongguan is equivalent to their second home, because their parents in there. In order to let children and parents reunite, every summer we will hold "small migrant birds" summer vacation activities. This is the fourth year. Unlike previous years, there are more outdoor activities and parent-child activities in this year, which provide immediately more chances to improve the relationship between parents and children. Meanwhile children learn a lot of practical knowledge which couldn’t be learned in class.
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Children's Summer Vacation Life(please help me to correct it, thank you so much)
Every summer vacation, there are special children who leave their school and hometown to be apart from their parents. Dongguan is equivalent to their second home, because their parents are(?) there. In order to let children and parents reunite, every summer we will hold "small migrant birds" summer vacation activities. This is the fourth year. Unlike previous years, there are more outdoor activities and parent-child activities in this year, which immediately provide more chances to improve the relationship between parents and children. Meanwhile children learn a lot of practical knowledge which couldn’t be learned in class.***
Hi Jade Liu,
Great job on your writing! This is a lovely entry. I did not have to make many changes, though I'm not sure if you want to use 'are' in the second sentence -- we do need a verb there. Let me know if you have any questions!
Best,
Julie
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