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Hinarii WONG
Where I live : Tahiti, French Polynesia Tahiti is an island in French Polynesia. French Polynesia is a group of islands that is an overseas country attached to France (so we're all French here). It is located in the Pacific Ocean, between New Zealand and Hawaii. A lot of tourists come here for their honeymoon or to feel at peace, closer to nature. They usually come to Tahiti, and then visit Bora Bora and Moorea, they're like islands that you have to visit if you come here (if you're crossing an ocean, might as well go to other islands and enjoy as much as you can...!). In the past, there were a lot of asians who came here to seek a better future and left their home town. That's why nowadays there are a lot of mixed people here. There are still full Tahitians, mixed people from Tahitians and Asians from South East Asia, and French people (Tahiti was colonized by the French in the 1900s). This was a short introduction of my home town, feel free to correct me if I made any mistakes ^^
2018年7月3日 07:33
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Where I live: Tahiti, French Polynesia

Tahiti is an island in French Polynesia. French Polynesia is a group of islands that is an overseas country attached with connections to to France (so we're all French here). It is located in the Pacific Ocean, between New Zealand and Hawaii.
A lot of tourists come here for their honeymoon or to feel at peace, closer to nature. They usually come to Tahiti, and then visit Bora Bora and Moorea; They're like islands that you have to visit if you come here (if you're crossing an ocean, might as well go to other islands and enjoy as much as you can...!).
In the past, there were a lot of asians Asians who came here to seek a better future and left their home town. That's why nowadays there are a lot of mixed people here. There are still full Tahitians, mixed people from Tahitians Tahiti, and Asians from South East Asia, and French people (Tahiti was colonized by the French in the 1900s).

This was a short introduction of my home town, feel free to correct me if I made any mistakes ^^

[Hi Hinarii,

Overall very good job! Most of my corrections were minor grammar/punctuation corrections and your note was very easily understood.


I changed "attached" to "with connections to" because "attached" can sound very literal (Example: physically attaching two objects together), but it's my understanding Tahiti's history with France is has more to do with politics than Tahiti's physical connection to France via land. Also I wasn't positive, but where I am from we often compound the word to become "hometown", but that may be a regional difference.

Be careful for run-on sentences as well; try to avoid using "and" too many times in a sentence!

Great work, I learned a lot! :D

Cheers,
Devon]

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