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A story lesson 24 During the sparring boxing Max knocked out to lose consciousness. Before the competition he knocked himself out in box. He dreamed to carry out of winning the competition. The day before he run into with his former coach. They set out to the cafe to intend to discuss the competition. But the coach suggested to Max to draw up the documents and give and take - dropped out of the team. But Max believed in his victory and thought that the coach would cheer up him. But as it turned out this meeting didn’t make sense.

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A story lesson 24

During the sparring boxing Max knocked  (Passive voice maybe?) out to lose  and lost consciousness. Before the competition he knocked himself out in boxing. He dreamed to carry out of the winning of the competition. The day before he run (wrong tense, "the day before" when is it in your grammar tables?) into with his former coach. They set out to the cafe to intending to discuss the competition. But the coach suggested to Max to draw up the documents and give and take - dropped out of the team (not sure what you mean here). But Max believed in his victory and thought that the coach would cheer up him (word order). But as it turned out this meeting didn’t make sense.
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Max was knocked out while sparring in a boxing session. He lost consciousness as well. Previous to this competition he also had been knocked out. He dreamed of one day winning the competition. The day before, Max ran into with his former coach. They set out to a cafe with the intent of discussing  the competition. The coach suggested to Max to drop out of the team. He draw up the documents for Max to withdraw from the team. Max had thought that the coach was going to try and cheer him up. Max believed that one day he would be victorious.  But as it turned out this meeting didn’t make sense to him.
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Hi Ludmila. I am glad you trying to improve your writing. Some of your sentences were unclear. I see that you can use some help with grammar and sentence structure. Please look at my correction. Let me know if you would like to take a lesson to help you improve in these areas. Thank you, Olu

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