Can you correct the published text, please?
I have translated the below text to be published on the poster inviting for an exhibition. IS this correct, please. Thank you.
This exhibition explains earth as an important building material used in the country in Moravia. The main stress is put on traditional techniques used to build walls of mud buildings. This extinct tradition is represented mostly by disappearing building on the ground. The exhibition unveils a little the easy yet effective building techniques of the bygone generations and bears and important witness to their life.
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It would be easier as a notebook entry, but:
This exhibition explains earth as an important building material used in the countryside[1] in Moravia. The main focus is[2] on traditional techniques used to build the walls of mud buildings. This extinct tradition is represented mostly by disappearing building on the ground[3] The exhibition unveils a little of the easy yet effective building techniques of the bygone generations and bears an important witness to their lives.
[1] Using countryside is a little clearer, as it almost reads as country of Moravia. You could also write 'rural areas of Mor..;
[2] Maybe a little more natural phrasing.
[3] Is not at all clear - I don't know what you are trying to write. Do you mean that the only evidence of these techniques is the ruins?
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A slight correction to my answer :) it is [!] sign. sorry
This exhibition explains earth soil[1] as an important building material used in the country of[2] Moravia. The main stress is put on traditional technique[!] used to build walls of mud buildings. This extinct tradition is represented mostly by old, fading buildings [3] on the ground. The exhibition unveils an[4] easy yet effective building technique of the bygone generations and bears and important testimony [5] to their [6]way of life.
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I'd write it like this:
This exhibition explains earth soil[1] as an important building material used in the country of[2] Moravia. The main stress is put on traditional techniques used to build walls of mud buildings. This extinct tradition is represented mostly by old, fading buildings [3] on the ground. The exhibition unveils an[4] easy yet effective building techniques of the bygone generations and bears and important testimony [5] to their [6]way of life.
I put my corrections in brackets [] and I hope I helped you out. Cheers
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