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I couldn’t keep my diary recently. Last week, I became 26 years old. So, Today, I’m going to write my current thinking.
A age of 26 is my challenge year. I leave my current job and do a working holiday in Denmark for next year in January. The first, I’m going to go to school, in which we can learn development of consciousness ourselves there.
When I applied this school, I wrote a short essay and here I wrote, “ I want to find my own path to happiness.” However, I changed my thoughts nowadays, because I cloud find a wonderful sentence that “Life isn’t about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself”. When I found this sentence, my mind is cleared, like a clouds shifted and a sun appeared.
So, l create a beautiful year!
2023년 11월 27일 오전 8:07
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I couldn’t keep my diary recently. Last week, I became 26 years old. So, Today,
I’m going to write my current thinking. A age of 26 is my challenge year. I
leave my current job and do a working holiday in Denmark for next year in
January. The first, I’m going to go to school, in which we can learn development
of consciousness ourselves there. When I applied this school, I wrote a short
essay and here I wrote, “ I want to find my own path to happiness.” However, I
changed my thoughts nowadays, because I cloud find a wonderful sentence that
“Life isn’t about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself”. When I
found this sentence, my mind is cleared, like a clouds shifted and a sun
appeared. So, l create a beautiful year!
So are you going to study in Denmark?
2023년 11월 27일
I couldn’t keep my diary recently. I became 26 years old last week, so today I’m going to write my current thinking. Being 26 is going to be challenging. I am leaving my current job and doing a working holiday in Denmark beginning next year in January.
I’m going to go to school, where we will learn the development of our conscious selves. When I applied to this school, I wrote a short essay that said: “ I want to find my own path to happiness.” However, I feel differently now, because I found a wonderful sentence that said:
“Life isn’t about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself.”
When I found this sentence, my mind was clear, like a cloud shifted and the Sun appeared. So, I'll create a beautiful year!
You did fantastic, light grammatical corrections.
I wasn't sure what you had in mind when you wrote "consciousness", so I fixed the grammar to the most understandable meaning.
For reference later; A vs An
When using A or An, consider the first sound of the word after.
If it SOUNDS like a vowel, use An; if not, use A.
A vowel, to remind anyone reading, is A E I O U.
For example: "An Apple" is correct, because Apple starts with an A sound.
"An Hour" is correct, because Hour, despite starting with an H, sounds like it starts with an OU sound.
"An Ukulele" is wrong depending on pronunciation; if pronounced correctly (Yu-ku-laylay), the word starts with a Y sound; so it should be "A Ukulele".
2023년 11월 27일
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