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Crime happens everywhere on earth , and it happens for many reasons. Some of these reasons depend on society, and some of them depend on families, and others depend on individuals.To begin with, experts discovered many ways to reduce crime. One of these ways is to have meals with family members,which contributes to reduce the rate of addiction to illicit drugs. In my opinion, the upbringing in home and schools,as well as friends are the most important factors that drive to crime , or in the contrary, inhibit it.
2022년 6월 5일 오전 9:26
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Crime happens everywhere on earth , and it happens for many reasons. Crime happens all around the world and it happens for many reasons. Some of these reasons depend on society, and some of them depend on families, and others depend on individuals. Some of these reasons are due to society and family influences, while other reasons depend on the individual themselves. To begin with, experts discovered many ways to reduce crime. Experts discovered many ways to reduce crime. [This statement needs more context.] One of these ways is to have meals with family members,which contributes to reduce the rate of addiction to illicit drugs. One way is to have meals with family members. This reduces the rate of addiction to illicit drugs. In my opinion, the upbringing in home and schools,as well as friends are the most important factors that drive to crime , or in the contrary, inhibit it. In my opinion, the influence from home, school, and friends are the most important factors that drive crime or on the contrary, inhibit it. Hi Aya, great effort. I have only adjusted sentences to feel a little more natural. The main comment I would add is regarding the sentence: "To begin with, experts discovered many ways to reduce crime." You will need to give context as to this statement. I am unsure what you are trying to say. Good luck!
2022년 6월 5일
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