I planned to hang out in a park, I saw a black swan family in the park yesterday, mom, dad and six babies, they are so cute. One person put some vegetables and bun into the bucket, they liked to eat.

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I planned to hang out in a park, I saw a black swan family in the park yesterday, mom, dad and six babies, they are so cute. One person put some vegetables and bun into the bucket, they liked to eat. I thought she maybe lived around there, she bought some vegetables, meat and breakfast.

2024년 3월 30일 오후 2:21

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I planned to hang out in a park. I saw a black swan family in the park yesterday, mom, dad and six babies. They are so cute. One person put some vegetables and a bun into the bucket, they liked to eat it. I thought she maybe lived around there, she bought some vegetables, meat and breakfast.

The first sentence was a bit long. Better to split them into smaller sentences.

2024년 4월 1일

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