an introduction of my hometown, please help revise it and make it better Hello, everybody! I'm Sullivan, from China. Today I write something about my hometown, Hangzhou, a city in the eastern parts of

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an introduction of my hometown, please help revise it and make it better Hello, everybody! I'm Sullivan, from China. Today I write something about my hometown, Hangzhou, a city in the eastern parts of China. The content is based on a tourist brochure. I hope you have a chance to go to my hometown. I would love to have you be my guest! And please help me revise it and polish it to make the writing more native. Thanks a lot! Hangzhou: A Paradise on Earth Marco Polo, a well-known Italian traveler, once described his impression of Hangzhou, “It is the most fascinating city in the world. It makes people feel as if they were at paradise.” A Chinese saying goes, “Hangzhou matches the beauty of a paradise.” Hangzhou earns its reputation from the picturesque West Lake. As the West Lake is beautiful all year around, Su Dongpo, a famous poet of Song dynasty(960-1279), compared it to a beauty who looks pretty either in heavy or light make-up. In Hangzhou, you can not only feast your eyes on the charming lake, but have a taste of wonderful dishes and snacks and buy some local specialties when wandering the bustling streets. The West Lake is divided into two parts by Su Causeway and Bai Causeway. They are like two green silk ribbons floating on waters. The West Lake, with rippling water and dense forests around dotted with pavilions and pagodas, is one of the most well-known scenic spots in China. Locals have their own way of appreciating the West Lake. According to them, the West Lake looks much prettier on rainy days than clear days, but it looks prettiest at night. If in Hangzhou, you are strongly recommended to see if the saying holds water. Hangzhou is one of the six famous ancient capitals of China, with a history of over 2,000 years. Apart from its natural scenery, Hangzhou also has traditional culture including the inscriptions and poems by men of letters, delicacies and exquisite handicrafts. Hangzhou is home to silk in China, producing a wide variety of silk, among which brocade is the most popular. Besides, there are specialties like black paper fans, sandalwood fans, parasols and Longjing tea, one of the top ten teas in China. Hangzhou also boast many well-known restaurants serving dishes of different styles and over a hundred guest houses and hotels providing accommodation for tourists. Normally, you are recommended to spend two days visiting the West Lake and nearby tourist attractions. A Hangzhou tour is pleasant and culturally rewarding as well.

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Here is an introduction of my home town. Please help revise it and make it better.

Hello everybody! I am Sullivan from China. Today I wrote something about my home town, Hangzhou, a city in the eastern parts of China. The content is based on a tourist brochure.
I hope you have a chance to go to my home town. I would love to have you be as my guest!
And Please help me revise it and polish it to make the writing more native. Thanks a lot!

Hangzhou: A Paradise on Earth

Marco Polo, a well-known Italian traveler, once described his impression of Hangzhou in these words, “It is the most fascinating city in the world. It makes people feel as if they were at paradise.” A Chinese saying goesstates, “Hangzhou matches the beauty of a paradise.”
Hangzhou earns its reputation from the picturesque West Lake. As the West Lake is beautiful all year around, Su Dongpo, a famous poet of Song dynasty(960-1279AD), compared it to a beautiful woman who looks pretty in either heavy or light make-up. In Hangzhou, you can not only feast your eyes on the charming lake, but have a taste of wonderful dishes and snacks and buy some local specialties when wandering the bustling streets.
The West Lake is divided into two parts by Su Causeway and Bai Causeway. They are like two green silk ribbons floating on waters. The West Lake, with rippling water and dense forests around dotted with pavilions and pagodas, is one of the most well-known scenic spots in China.
Locals have their own way of appreciating the West Lake. According to them, the West Lake looks much prettier on rainy days than clear days, but it looks prettiest at night. If in Hangzhou, you are strongly recommended to see if the saying holds water.
Hangzhou is one of the six famous ancient capitals, of China, with a history of over 2,000 years. Apart from its natural scenery, Hangzhou also has traditional culture including the inscriptions and poems by men of letters, delicacies, and exquisite handicrafts.
Hangzhou is home to silk in China, producing a wide variety of silk among which brocade is the most popular. Besides, there are specialties like black paper fans, sandalwood fans, parasols, and Longjing tea; one of the top ten teas in China.
Hangzhou also boast many well-known restaurants serving dishes of different styles and over a hundred guest houses and hotels providing accommodation for tourists.
Normally, you are recommended to spend two days visiting the West Lake and nearby tourist attractions. A Hangzhou tour is pleasant and culturally rewarding as well.