bhagyoban!

ami siksok sthapon koresi. shiksok Bangladesh e thake. ami Maui thaki.
Bangladesh theke maui solo ghonta somoy lage. amar budhbar a shotro; shiksok 

brihospotibar a shotro. pore likhbo abar.

bhagyoban!

ami siksok sthapon kori. siksok bangladesh thake. ami maui thaki.
bangladesh solo ghonta somoy maui soja. amar budhbar sotro; siksok
brhospotibar sotro. pore lekha hobe. 

 first sentence i am unable to understand what you mean to say..second sentence no mistake.third sentence correct.fourth sentence -bangla desh  maui theke sholo ghonta shomoy lage.fifth sentence- budhbare amar shotro;siksoker brihaspatibar shotro.sixth sentence abar pore likhbo..