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A change in my life Thank you for reading my story. When I was a middle school student, I studied at a small school in a town. Maybe because the simple knowledge and without a fierce competition, I can always get top three grades in my class easily. But it changed since I entered the best high school in my city. I needed to study ten subjects at the same time and most of my classmates are very smart. But I didn't realize the hard circumstance and still immersed in the sad of the separation of my old friends. Until I got a very bad grade, I finally knew that a lot of things have changed and I have to adapt them. To improve my grade,at first, I made a goal and a plan. Besides, I learned hard and tried my best to find a learning method which suits me. What's more, I communicated with my classmates at leisure to find new friends. That is effective. When I graduated from my high school, I gained the second high grade in my class and a lot of friends. In our life, we will encounter varies change and challenge. Improving ourselves is the best way to solve it.
10 apr. 2013 13:54
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When I was a middle school student, I studied at a small school in a town. I always easily ranked among the top three in my class, perhaps due to the school's simple curriculum, or the lack of tough competition. But once I entered the city's best high school, things changed. I needed to study ten subjects at the same time and most of my classmates were very smart. I didn't realize how difficult circumstances would be. I felt, too, like I was drowning in sadness, having been separated from old friends. When eventually I got a very bad grade, it served as a wake-up call: I realized that a lot had changed, and I that I, too, would have to adapt. I needed to improve my grades, and so I immediately set some goals and made a plan. I studied hard and worked to find a new learning method which would better suit me. What's more, I got to know my classmates during our leisure time, in an effort to make new friends. All of this proved very effective. When I graduated from high school, I had achieved the second highest grade in my class, and had made a lot of friends. In our lives, we will encounter a variety of changes and challenges, and the best way to meet with them is always by endeavoring to improve ourselves.

 

Your composition was very good! I have made mostly stylistic & word choice changes, to make it sound a bit more "native". Keep up the good work!

 

你写的非常好!大多数的变化只是我自己喜好的风格变体,一点儿更地道的。真不错吧!加油!

13 april 2013
Nice Story i think ;))
10 april 2013
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