Points in green are not mistakes, but recommendations/personal preference, I include them for reference because I think it makes it read better :)
Exercise: Ask for Advice to Study Abroad
TASK DESCRIPTION:
You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.
MY LETTER:
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you well. I've always been missing I miss the days that we spent together when you studied as an international student here. I'm very happy to let you know that I'm soon also (this isn't bad, but I would personally omit 'also') going coming to your city to take a course in order to improve my programming skills and, if possible, work there. But* However, I'm still planning it and need you to help me would like your help.
* If possible, try to avoid beginning sentences with 'but', 'then', 'and', etc. see here for more info: http://www.dailywritingtips.com/can-you-start-sentences-with-%E2%80%9Cand%E2%80%9D-and-%E2%80%9Cbut%E2%80%9D/
As you've known, I majored in programming in my university studies and acquired the a Bachelor’s Degree in 2008. I then I wrote code for Bausch & Lomb as at my first job. Later, I changed my job and has have since then been working for CMCC, developing new software.
I'd like to ask what which courses in what which colleges would suit me. Can Could you recommend some? In addition, what are the documents and certificates I must must I submit to apply for the courses you recommend, and to where shall should I send my application?
Thanks for your information your help and I hope to hear from you and meet you again soon.
Your friend,
Melfree
Exercise: Ask for Advice to Study Abroad
TASK DESCRIPTION:
You have a friend who lives in a city abroad.You have decided that you would like to apply to do(UK)/take(US) a course at one of the colleges in this city.Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.
MY LETTER:
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you well. I miss the days we spent together when you studied here. I'm very happy to let you know that soon I'll be coming to your city to do/take a course in order to improve my programming skills and, if possible work there. But I'm still in the planning stage and need your help if possible.
As you know, I majored in programming at my university and received my Bachelor’s Degree in 2008. Then I wrote code for Bausch & Lomb as my first job. Later, I changed my job and have since been working for CMCC, developing new software.
I'd like to ask which courses at what colleges would you recommend. In addition, any information regarding the documents and certificates that must be submitted for each application, as well as the departments they should be sent to.
Thanks in advance for any information or suggestions and I hope to hear from you and see you again soon. If this is all just a little too much for you to take on right now, then don't worry, I will sort it out myself somehow. Regardless, we will be able to spend some time together in the near future.
Your friend,
Melfree
Exercise: Ask for Advice to Study Abroad
TASK DESCRIPTION:
You have a friend who lives in a city abroad.You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.
MY LETTER:
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you well. I've always been missing the days we spent together when you studied as an international student here. I'm very happy to let you know that I'm soon also going to your city to take a course in order to improve my programming skills, and if possible, work there. But I'm still planning it and need you to help me.
As you've known, I majored in programming in my university studies and acquired a Bachelor’s Degree in 2008. Then I wrote code for Bausch & Lomb as my first job. Later, I changed my job and has since then been working for CMCC, developing new software.
I'd like to ask what courses in what colleges would suit me. Can you recommend some? In addition, what are the documents and certificates I must submit to apply for the courses you recommend, and to where shall I send my application?
Thanks for your information and I hope to hear from you and meet you soon.
Your friend,
Melfree
