Search from various Engels teachers...
伤心一阵风
Single's Day is coming Single's Day is approaching to me,just like my bithday,always so defenitely.Sometimes,I regard myself as a failure,no appearance,no money,noability,even no future.However,at the same time , my father's face will come into my my eyes,as if he were looking at me with diappointment.So,some kinfd of force is full of my body,And then ,I get recovering,I should try my best to be his honor,not his shame.Thar is my goal.Wish the god bless my father with a long life.
10 nov. 2010 12:54
Correcties · 7

Single's Day Is Coming

Single's Day is approaching to me, just like my birthday, without fail. always so defenitely definitely.Sometimes, I regard myself as a failure,no appearance,no beauty, no money, no ability and even no future. However, at the same time, my father's face will come into my appears before my eyes, as if he were was looking at me with diappointment.  Some strange force fills my body So, some kinfd of force is full of my body1 And then ,I get recoveringif I can recover from this ordeal, I should try do my best to become his honor, not his shame. That is This will be my goal.  Wish the God bless my father with a long life longevity.

Why so sad?  You essay is the saddest one of all the 1400 essays I had corrected.  You profile photo does not show an ugly face.  If you have no money, then earn it.  We all don't have the kind of money you are dreaming of.  We all have to work for it.  Not everyone is born with a silver spoon.  If you have no ability, go and learn something!  What do you mean you have no future?  The future is in your hands.  What you have, you did not realize is youth!!!  Millions of others will gladly trade your youth for all their wealth!

You punctuation spacing is all wrong.  No spaces before comma or full stop.  Leave one space after a comma and 2 spaces after a full stop.

 

1.  I don't understand this sentence.  So I am guessing.  Write in Chinese if you want an accurate correction.

21 september 2011
wish you can have a girl friend in the resent future,and wish your father a good health.
10 november 2010
Thank you for your unstanding. Single's Day is 11th,Nov. Because in this day , the numbers of the date are all 1.
21 september 2011
I think I can understand your feelings very well. Don't give up! By the way, when is this Single's Day and what is it?
13 november 2010
Wil je sneller vooruitgang boeken?
Word nu lid van deze leer-community en probeer de gratis oefeningen uit!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!