Today's shopping.

The weather was great [on this day] ['Today' is more natural]! I went to the park with my kids, but there were lots of the people there. We could not play much. We went shopping after that and I bought a blueray. I've wanted one for a long time, but I don't understand how to use it. Hang in there![I will hang in there!] ??

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間隔に注意してください。Use: And, But, However, So

use less '.' and more ',' 

しかし、全部分かりました。よくできました！