toefl writing sample about communication ( evaluate my passage)

From my perspective , communications by telephone or face to face is better than via E-mail or voice mail . There are several reasons why I prefer personal interaction rather than other kinds of communication. The first reason is that it's more sociable and you have the opportunity to see and listen to the person talking to you so other actions like gestures and voice tone can affect the message you receive or want to send. Another reason is that it's much easier and faster to convey a message by in person rather than by typing a set of words . The other reason is that the chance of misunderstanding is low and you don't need to confirm your message by another E-mail.
In conclusion I am inclined toward the traditional personal contact with people as it is the a more convenient way for human communications.

Good work!  Not sure about the last sentence.  May need a re-write.