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Could you please correct my mistakes? Essay (CAE) How modern technology change the world? Nobody would dispute that nowadays technology plays an immense role in people's lives. Therefore, it is natural that modern society feels some effects of daily use of technology equipment. Thus, the purpose of this essay is to define which sphere of life has experienced the impact of modern gadgets the most. The first area where these ubiquitous tools and the one and only Internet cannot go unnoticed is undoubtedly the human communication. Nowadays, most of people's socialization happens in the Internet, via messengers and video calls. This is arguably handy for interaction between acquaintances and colleagues, as this gives an opportunity to exchange information quickly and practically on 24 hour basis. On the other hand, according to most researchers, this approach is completely inappropriate for creating profound relationships and long-lasting bonds, which require a greater emotional input. And unfortunately, it turns out that today's world order ruled by technology, makes it more and more difficult for young to find a partner. Moreover, some of them, absorbed by this new virtual world find love relationships pointless, as according to their point of view, they cannot compete with the pleasures and freedom virtual communication gives them. Summing up, without any doubt the impact of modern technologies on today's society is simultaneously positive and negative. However, I believe that what requires attention to a greater extent is the way Internet and gadgets affect human relationships, as it entails such serious consequences as declining birth rate and overall solitude of the population.
12 okt. 2018 09:54
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Could you please correct my mistakes? Essay (CAE)

How modern technology change the world?

Nobody would dispute that nowadays technology plays an immense role in people's lives. Therefore, it is natural that modern society feels some effects of the daily use of technology equipment. Thus, the purpose of this essay is to define which sphere of life has experienced the impact of modern gadgets the most.

The first area where these ubiquitous tools and the one and only Internet cannot go unnoticed is undoubtedly  human communication. Nowadays, most of people's socialising happens in the Internet, via messengers and video calls. This is arguably handy for interaction between acquaintances and colleagues, as this gives an opportunity to exchange information quickly and practically on a 24 hour basis.

On the other hand, according to most researchers, this approach is completely inappropriate for creating profound relationships and long-lasting bonds, which require a greater emotional input. And unfortunately, it turns out that today's world order ruled by technology, makes it more and more difficult for young people to find a partner. Moreover, some of them, absorbed by this new virtual world find love relationships pointless, as according to their point of view, they cannot compete with the pleasures and freedom virtual communication gives them.

Summing up, without any doubt the impact of modern technologies on today's society is simultaneously positive and negative. However, I believe that what requires attention, to a greater extent, is the way the Internet and gadgets affect human relationships, as it entails serious consequences such as the declining birth rate and overall solitude of the population.


Excellent article, Anna. Very well written.

12 oktober 2018
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Could you please correct my mistakes? Essay (CAE)

How has modern technology change the world?

Nobody would dispute that nowadays technology plays an immense role in people's lives. Therefore, it is natural that modern society notices effects from the daily use of technological devices. Thus, the purpose of this essay is to define which area / sector / part  of life has experienced the impact of modern gadgets the most.

The first area where these ubiquitous tools, in particular the internet, cannot go unnoticed is undoubtedly the human communication. Nowadays  These days, most of people's socialisation happens on the Internet, via messengers and video calls. Arguably this is handy for interaction between acquaintances and colleagues, as this gives an opportunity to exchange information quickly and practically around the clock / with no time constraints  on 24 hour basis.

On the other hand, according to most researchers, this approach is completely inappropriate for creating profound relationships and long-lasting bonds, which require a greater emotional input. And Unfortunately, it turns out that today's technology ruled world makes it more and more difficult for young people to find a partner. Moreover, some of them are so absorbed by this new virtual world that they find romantic relationships pointless, as from their point of view, they cannot compete with the pleasures and freedom that virtual communication gives them.

Summing up / In summary, without any doubt the impact of modern technology on today's society is simultaneously positive and negative. However, I believe that what requires greater attention to a greater extent is the way the Internet and gadgets affect human relationships, as it entails such serious consequences there are serious consequences such as, declining birth rate and the overall solitude of the population.



12 oktober 2018
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