Business Sentences
Could you please revise these sentences:

- Address a medium-term process for the transformation of the current Infoproviders’ management operating model into a centralized Competence Center serving all Group's Companies, by: process review, strengthening control on cost budgeting and forecasting, implementation of IT tools for data inventory and entitlement management as well as for monitoring data consumption

- Evaluation of internal demand for purchasing new info & market data services usually related to the development of business or regulatory projects

many thx

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Business Sentences
Could you please revise these sentences:

- Address a medium-term process for the transformation of the current Infoproviders’ management operating model into a centralized Competence Center serving all Group's Companies, by: process review, strengthening control on cost budgeting and forecasting, implementation of IT tools for data inventory and entitlement management as well as for monitoring data consumption

- Evaluation of internal demand for purchasing new info & market data services usually related to the development of business or regulatory projects

many thx

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This is complete gobbledygook. 
They are all English words but appear to have been put together by a random word generator.  As far as I can tell, it is trying to say that we are going to make some changes to the way things are currently being done by centralising some processes with the objective of greater efficiency and effectiveness.  But then again, maybe it doesn't say that!

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Luca, Business sentences are not my in my area of expertise, but I am an educated, native speaker. Unfortunately, business academics have a liking for this sort of inpenetrable, jargon filled English  It is their deluded way of showing off how how clever, they are. I have have only a vague understanding of the meaning. Maybe someone else can help. In any case don't mimic this sort of writing. Best wishes, Peter

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A great example of the concept of "Baffle them with Bullshit"... Which only works if you are talking to idiots.

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