Improved Version: --- I took a photo at my 20th birthday celebration. I wore a traditional Japanese dress called a furisode. Mine was red—tight, heavy, but truly beautiful. My mother seemed happy to see me in it, and I felt really happy too. I want to grow into someone special by the time I turn 20. --- Short Explanations: 1. “a picture which is a 20years old celebration” → “a picture at a celebration for turning 20” Clearer word order and grammar. 2. “a clothe” → “clothing” or “a dress” “Clothe” is a verb. Use “clothing” or “a dress” for garments. 3. “Hurisode” → “furisode” Correct spelling (romanized form). Use italics for foreign words. 4. “looked like happy” → “looked happy” “Look like” is followed by a noun; here you need an adjective. 5. “until I will be 20” → “by the time I turn 20” “By the time” is the natural phrase for goals before a certain age.