Tom 焦俊瀚
There are two big events took place yesterday. First,my uncle got married, my aunt and he have had a romantic relationship since their high school. During the wedding, I was moved to tears, because I was envious of their love. Hope they can live happily ever after. Second, I received an email informing me that I got a scholarship in my second year at university.Although it is the lowest tiers of scholarship, i still cherish it. Because it represents my hard work paid off
4 gru 2020 01:39
Poprawki · 5
There are two big events that took place yesterday. First, my uncle got married, my aunt and he have had a romantic relationship since high school. During the wedding, I was moved to tears, because I was envious of their love. Hope they can live happily ever after. Second, I received an email informing me that I got a scholarship in my second year at university. Although it is the lowest tier of scholarship, I still cherish it. Because it represents my hard work paid off
4 grudnia 2020
There are two big events took place yesterday. First,my uncle got married, my aunt and he have had a romantic relationship since their high school. During the wedding, I was moved to tears, because I was envious of their love. Hope they can live happily ever after. Second, I received an email informing me that I got a scholarship in my second year at university.Although it is the lowest tiers of scholarship, i still cherish it. Because it represents my hard work paid off
Congratulations🙂🤞
4 grudnia 2020
There were two big events that took place yesterday. First, my uncle got married. He and my aunt have had a romantic relationship since high school. During the wedding, I was moved to tears because I was envious of their love. I hope they can/will live happily ever after. Second, I received an email informing me that I got a scholarship in my second year at university. Although it is the lowest-tier scholarship, I still cherish it because it shows that my hard work paid off.
Congratulations and good job! A few notes about word choice: It is ok to use envious here. However, I will warn you that it has a bit of a negative connotation (or I think it does; others might disagree)- it’s similar to jealous in that it sounds a bit like you’re bitter because your aunt and uncle have something you don’t have. Here’s how I might say it without the bitterness: I was moved to tears because their love was so beautiful and I hoped in the future I could have a relationship like theirs. because I wished I could have a love like theirs. And about « cherish »- again, it’s ok. But I think it’s a sentimental word- used in weddings and such, or you might cherish a sentimental item. A man might say he cherishes the woman he wants to marry, and she might cherish a necklace he gives her. It’s not too out of place here, but I think it might imply more of a devoted love than you mean. You might try something a bit less strong: I am still proud of it I am still excited about it Maybe I’m off about this, but that’s my two cents. They’re good words to know, and you did a good job.
4 grudnia 2020
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