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emotion I was alone in the bedroom. I didn't know what I'm thinking about maybe in my childhood. I couldn't stop my mind from thinking, I felt sad, I didn't care if somebody told something, I'm alone. I didn't want to talk to anybody, I wanted to release myself, I felt like my mind would burst. could my lovely friend help me? or maybe deep sleep can stop my pain. I closed my ears for don't hear then I turned off my lamp for living peacefully. (please correct me if I have an error )

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I'm alone in the bedroom, I don't know what I'm thinking, about maybe about in my childhood. I can't stop my mind to thinking, I feel sad, I don't care if somebody told said something, I'm alone . I don't want to talk to anybody, I want to release myself, I feel like my mind will burst. can Can my lovely friend help me ? or maybe deep sleep can stop my pain. I close shut my ears for so that I don't hear anything, then I turned off my lamp for living peacefully.
(please correct me if I have an error )

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I'm alone in the bedroom., I don't know what I'm thinking about, maybe in my childhood. I can't stop my mind to from thinking, I feel sad, I don't care if somebody told something, I'm alone . I don't want to talk to anybody, I want to release myself, I feel like my mind will burst. can my lovely friend help me ? or maybe deep sleep can stop my pain. I closed my ears for don't hear so i couldn't hear, then I turned off my lamp for living peacefully.
(please correct me if I have an error )

動詞の時制エラーがいっぱいあった。気をつけてね。

現在形か過去形か分からない。

Be careful with verb tenses. It is difficult to tell if this is a diary, or abstract artistic composition from the tense confusion.

Hope it helps! :-)

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