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Day 3: Experiences
This is the third day that I follow my plan and write here. Thank you for your help! :)
I was thinking that when you make up a story here you practice English but also work on in your creativity and it is hard, no? At least, for me it is. When I was a child we had to frequently write short stories and in that time it looked easier maybe because we did not think too much about someone else opinions. So, let me try again ...
Once upon a time, there was a place where people did not judge anyone (when I say judge, I mean judge your sexuality, your physical appearance, professional choices and etc), did not worry about wars and really cared about things that really matter, for example, having good friends, food and a place to live, time to spend with their love ones and theirselves. Those people were so aware that we have just one life that they wanted to live in the best way possible. I was thinking in this story and for me it is so obvious that this is what matters that I can not understand why there are some people desperate to prove they are right, they deserve power, how they can be so happy to make others miserable. Of course that this kind of person do not have people around who really care about them, because you attract the type of person you are. So, if you are selfish, dishonest and false, for sure, you are going to attract this kind of person. It is too much for me to understand how this can be good. It is like those people are sick or they have a problem that make they see the world from another perspective. I do not know, maybe I am wrong and they are right. So, in my opinion we should live in harmony, avoid destruction, do things to preserve this harmony, I think if everybody acted in this way everybody could have a better life, you know? It is simple to think like this, I know. In reality, we have a lot of problems in our world and it is true people are sick (phsysical and mental), everybody has a different experience, in consequence, we have different values and this make our personality. But if experiences can change us I think we should expose ourselves to more different type of experiences, I think maybe in this way we could feel better the real problems, we would have more knowledge to do better decisions in a way that we become the place we live more harmonious.
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Day 3: Experiences
This is the third day that I have followed my plan and written here. Thank you for your help! :)
I was thinking that when you make up a story here you practice English, but also work on <s>in</s> your creativity and it is hard, no? At least, for me it is. When I was a child we had to frequently write short stories and in that time it <s>looked</s> seemed easier maybe, because we did not think too much about someone else's opinions. So, let me try again ...
Once upon a time, there was a place where people did not judge anyone (when I say judge, I mean judge your sexuality, your physical appearance, professional choices, <s>and</s> etc), did not worry about wars and really cared about things that really mattered, for example, having good friends, food and a place to live, time to spend with their loved ones and themselves. Those people were so aware that we have just one life that they wanted to live it in the best way possible. I was thinking <s>in</s> about this story and for me it is so obvious that this is what matters that I cannot understand why there are some people desperate to prove they are right, they deserve power, how they can be so happy to make others miserable. Of course <s>that</s> this kind of person does not have people around who really care about them, because you attract the type of person you are. So, if you are selfish, dishonest and false, for sure, you are going to attract this kind of person. It is too much for me to understand how this can be good. It is like those people are sick, or they have a problem that makes them see the world from another perspective. I do not know, maybe I am wrong and they are right. So, in my opinion we should live in harmony, avoid destruction, do things to preserve this harmony, I think if everybody acted in this way, everybody could have a better life, you know? It is simple to think like this, I know. In reality, we have a lot of problems in our world and it is true people are sick (physically and mentally), everybody has <s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</s> different experiences, <s>in</s> consequently, we have different values and this makes our personality. But if experiences can change us, I think we should expose ourselves to more different types of experiences, so I think maybe in this way we could feel better about the real problems, we would have more knowledge to <s>do</s> make better decisions in a way that we <s>become</s> make the place we live more harmonious.
Olá Mayara, muito bem.
I have followed my plan - you are counting time - three days, so the perfect tense.
Cannot is one word. In less formal writing you can put "can't". We can write it in two words if you want to give emphasis: can <em>not</em>!
Keep practicing! Simón.
16 sierpnia 2020
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Znajomość języków
angielski, portugalski, hiszpański
Język do nauczenia się
angielski, hiszpański
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