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Junk food Junk food comes in many colours, flavours, and types of packaging. Most of it contains very little nutrition. Some of the junk foods are in the form of drink. The drink are usually colourful and contain lot of sugar. These drink can cause diabetes and hyperactivity. Many school kids are addicted to these drink and this has become a big problem to our health care system. Burgers and fries are another form of junk food. They originated from western countries where the lifestyles need fast and convenient food that is usually fried and coated in sauces. These types of food usually have high cholesterol content. This paired with sweet colas is a recipe for disaster. It can lead to serious obesity problem and heart attack. Another worrying example of junk food that is widely available is candy. The most favourite food for younger kids. It can be found in variety shapes, colours, wrappings and flavours almost at everywhere. Candy usually cheap and usually sold in places where there are children and kids. It become serious when most of the candies have dangerous or food colouring and flavouring. Some have been banned by Ministry of Health. In conclusion, some effort should be done to educate the public especially young generation about the dangerous of junk food.

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Good writing and correction, but the paragraphs are wrong, use proper spacing.
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Junk food

Junk food comes in many colours, flavours, and types of packaging. Most of it contains very little nutrition.
Some junk foods come in the form of drinks. Drinks are usually colourful and contain lots of sugar. These drinks can cause diabetes and hyperactivity. Many school kids are addicted to these drinks, and this has become a big problem to our health care system.
Burgers and fries are another form of junk food. They originated from western countries where the lifestyles need fast and convenient food that is usually fried and coated in sauces. These types of foods usually have a high cholesterol content. This fact about burgers and fries, paired with sweet colas, is a recipe for disaster. It can lead to serious obesity problems and heart attacks.
Another worrying example of junk food that is widely available is candy, which is the most favored food for younger kids. It can be found in a variety shapes, colours, wrappings and flavours almost everywhere. Candy is rather cheap, and is usually sold in places where there are children. It becomes serious when most of these candies have dangerous food colouring and flavouring. Some of these have been banned by the Ministry of Health.
In conclusion, some effort should be done to educate the public, especially the younger generation about the dangers of junk food.

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This is very good! "Dangerous" should be "Dangers" in the conclusion. Wow I wish other Americans could be as savvy as you about food! LOL

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