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The Trip to Xiashan resevoir
Xiashan resevoir is the biggest fresh-water lake in the whole of Shandong province.It's in Weifang, specifically, in Anqiu.It is surrounded with by mountains. Most of them have hand-made stairs for the people to climb up .Still, it's beautiful.
But we went to the resevoir not to climb mountains, but for fishing.
There's a lot of ponds near the resevoir and we went to one of the baddest worst: a narrow lane with lots of mud on it, a tiny stream full of small green water plants on it,and a big yellow pond, wich give one an impression that nothing is in it.
My family and the other sat down under some trees-that's the only good news for us.Me and a small boy felt very boring bored. So we caught some tiny fish and watched them play around. When we finally felt sleepy, mum exclaimed:"Wow!Fish on, the line! Fish on the hook!" We hurried toward them.A silver coloured fish is sruggling in the river. He is splashing and making lots of currents as he was pulled toward the shore.It is a middle size fish and we put him in a net.Then, we still put the net in water but he can't escape.
"Can't I try?" I asked twenty minutes later,"Oh, no" Dad said scornfully."You try?" I'm afraid that you'll be pulled......" "Fish, Fish,quick,drag the pole, come on!” exclaimed before he finished."Then again, maybe you can try it". He shrugged his shoulder. It's a huge fish.With four nostrils on it! We put it in the same net and feed it some food.
We caught a few more small fish, but they're so small we have to leave them alone.
At about 4:40, we took a ride on the car and returnd home. We're gonna cook the fish.They'll be delicious.And it was, really a fun day.
May 20th 2012
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Very good entry! Just a few notes:
we went to one of the baddest
When speaking about something being the most bad out of a group of things, you should use "worst". It's similar to how the most good out of a group of things is "best". So, good > better > best; and bad > worse > worst
Me and a small boy felt very boring.
When speaking about how you yourself feel, you are "bored". When you use "boring" in the way you did in your sentence, you're saying you are causing others to feel bored.
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