يوم في الخارج

قضينا زوجي وأنا يوم الأحد في الخارج.
ذهبنا إلى وسط المدينة لتناول طعام الفطورفي مطعم.
بعد ذلك ذهبنا إلى حديقة/ متنزه ولعبنا الجولف المصغّر. كان هناك الكثير من المرح.
ثم مشينا إلى مقعد وجلسنا عليه وتحدّثنا لوقت طويل.
بعد هذا أكلنا مثلجات ومشينا إلى بركة جميلة حيث جلسنا قليلًا.
وبعد هذا زرنا معرضًا للصور الفوتوغرافية.
بعد ذلك رجعنا/ عدنا إلى وسط المدينة وأكلنا الكباب والبطاطس المقلية.
ثم رجعنا إلى منزلنا لمشاهدة مباراة لكرة القدم.
كان يومًا جميلًا جدًا.

ENGLISH TRANSLATION: A day out
On Sunday, my husband and I had a day out.
We went to the city centre to have breakfast in a restaurant.
After that, we went to a park to play mini golf. It was a lot of fun.
Then we walked to a bench and sat on it and talked for a long time.
After that, we ate an ice cream and walked to a pond where we sat a little bit.
After that, we visited a photography exposition.
After that, we went to the city centre and ate kebab and french fries.
Then we returned home and watched a football match.
It was a very beautiful day.

يوم في الخارج

يوم في الخارج

 أنا وزوجي 

(2) : it does not sound Arabic. The natural verb used with a day out in Arabic is "to spend" قضى - يقضي 

قضينا يوم في الخارج

(3) : لتناول / tanawoul/ because لـ is followed by maSdar مصدر which is a noun in Arabic 

(4) : missing dot  for ذ

(5) : you can either say لمدة طويلة or لوقت طويل  not both of them 

(6) : either عدنا or رجعنا  not both of them 

(7) : يوم

يوم في الخارج

this is the minimum number of correction that make any own understand what you say

your arabic is good

ENGLISH TRANSLATION: A day out
On Sunday, my husband and I had a day out.
We went to the city centre to have breakfast in a restaurant.
After that, we went to a park to play mini golf. It was a lot of fun.
Then we walked to a bench and sat on it and talked for a long time.
After that, we ate an ice cream and walked to a pond where we sat a little bit.
After that, we visited a photography exposition.
After that, we went to the city centre and ate kebab and french fries.
Then we returned home and watched a football match.
It was a very beautiful day.

يوم في الخارج

great job Lisiane :))  .. I corrected based on the english translation cuz you can say phrase in many ways. 

Tips

1. It's better to mention the speaker first so you better say (انا و زوجى)

2. (عدنا) and ( رجعنا) are the sam meaning you can use one of them in a phrase