My iPhone was drowned
Last weekend, I went out for sea kayaking and I was practicing one of a self-rescue technique called "roll". A sea kayak is a kind of a small canoe. It's easy to capsize. When you capsized, sit in the kayak in the water upside down, sway the paddle in the water and flip over the kayak by yourself. This technique is called "roll".
I paddled to a shallow point in a cove, then I started practicing roll. I was capsizing my kayak and trying flip over again. But it was not so easy to be able to do, I failed many times. I took off my spray skirt in the water, and hopped off the kayak. Then I emptied the kayak and turn over it using my hands. After that I reentered the kayak. It was so difficult to climb up a floating kayak and sit in the cockpit. I was practicing again and again.
A couple of hours later, I almost mastered the technique. I had got the knack of it. After the practice, when I was landing, I found out my iPhone in my soaked pocket. It didn't work anymore.
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My iPhone was drowned
Last weekend, I went out for sea kayaking and I was practicing one of a self-rescue technique called a "roll". A sea kayak is a kind of a small canoe. It's easy to capsize. When you capsized, sit in the kayak in the water upside down, sway (?) the paddle in the water and flip yourself over over the kayak by yourself. This technique is called a "roll".I paddled to a shallow point in a cove, then I started practicing the roll. I was capsizing my kayak and trying flip over again. But it was not so easy to be able to do. I failed many times. I took off my spray skirt in the water, and hopped off the kayak. Then I emptied the kayak and turned it over it using my hands. After that I reentered tried to climb back into the kayak. It was so difficult to climb up a floating kayak and sit in the cockpit. I was practicing practiced again and again.
A couple of hours later, I almost mastered the technique. I had got the knack of it. After the practicing, when I was landing, I found out my iPhone in my soaked pocket. It didn't work anymore.
Wow! This was really excellent. Hope that my notes help. Lydia (native speaker of English from the USA)
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My iPhone was drowned
Last weekend, I went out for sea kayaking and I was practicing one of a self-rescue technique called "the roll". A sea kayak is a kind of a small canoe. It's easy to capsize. When you capsized, sit Once you are capsized, remain seated in the kayak in the water upside down, sway the paddle in the water and flip over the kayak over by yourself. This technique is called "the roll".I paddled to a shallow point in a cove, then I started practicing the roll. I was capsizing my kayak and trying flip over again. But it was not so easy to be able to do easy to do, and I failed many times. I took off my spray skirt in the water, and hopped off the kayak. Then I emptied the kayak and turned over it using my hands. After that I reentered the kayak. It was so difficult to climb up into a floating kayak and sit in the cockpit. I was kept practicing again and again.
A couple of hours later, I had almost mastered the technique. I had got the knack of it. After the practice, when I had landed was landing, I found out my iPhone soaked in my soaked pocket. It didn't work anymore.
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Great piece! Very easy to read and sounded natural. Keep in mind that "drown" is a verb typically used when talking about living things (people and animals who have died in the water). Saying that an iPhone "drowned" is definitely a good use of the word and is common, since people think of their smartphones as being living things in a lot of ways that do die when they get dropped in water. Just keep in mind that most non-living things can't drown. A brick, a broom, or a bottle would not "drown" in the water"
Best,
Andy
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My iPhone was drowned
Last weekend, I went out for sea kayaking and I was practicing one of a self-rescue technique called "roll". A sea kayak is a kind of a small canoe. It's easy to capsize. When you are capsized, sit in the kayak in the water upside down, sway the paddle in the water and flip over the kayak over by yourself. This technique is called the "roll".I paddled to a shallow point in a cove, then I started practicing the roll. I was capsizing my kayak and trying flip over again. But it was not so easy to be able to do, I failed many times. I took off my spray skirt in the water, and hopped off the kayak. Then I emptied the kayak and turn over it using my hands. After that I reentered the kayak. It was so difficult to climb up a floating kayak and sit in the cockpit. I was practicing again and again.
A couple of hours later, I had almost mastered the technique. I had got the knack of it. After the practice, when I was landing, I found out my iPhone in my soaked pocket. It didn't work anymore.
Very sad story :(
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