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To be aware of animal´s right I found this writing that I wrote about one year ago. I can notice that there are some awkward sentences but I am not quite sure how to make it better! Please help me! I am not a vegetarian and I have a few animal fur clothing, too. But I now think that I should really be more conscious of what's happening in the world, not just to pay attention to the small world I live in. Last night, just to kill some time, I looked up a funny cat video compilation at Youtube and watched it. It was cute and funny at first, but it became not as the video went on. There were some videos in which their cat was so angry that it was punching and hissing at the camera. I felt very disgusted at the laughing of the owner and people around. The cat must have been so scared to make such a strong reaction, but people in the background of the video were enjoying how cute the cat looked while it's desperately defending itself. It's really cruel that we are so indifferent to the pain of other creatures. So this video from last night made me intrigued when I found this article at CNN, which even got me to posting about it at my blog in such a long time. I just hope someone who just happens to come across my blog and to watch this post also becomes a little more interested about this matter, but more importantly, me first, from now on, keep alerted how so many species that I know are disappearing and how I am contributing to that.

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To Be Aware of Animals' Rights

I found this writing I wrote about one year ago. I can notice that there are some awkward sentences but I am not quite sure how to make them better! Please help me!

I am not a vegetarian and I have a few animal fur clothings
But I think now I should really be more conscious on what's happening in the world, not just pay attention to the small world I live in.

Last night, just to kill some time, I looked up a funny cat video compilation on YouTube and watched it.
It was cute and funny at first, but it became not as the video went on. <-----what were you trying to say?

There were some videos in which the cats were so angry that they were punching and hissing at the camera. I felt very disgusted at the laughter of the owners and people around. The cats must have been so scared to make such  strong reactions. But people in the backgrounds of the videos were enjoying how cute the cat looked while they desperately defended themselves.

It's really cruel that we are so indifferent to the pain of other creatures.
So this video from last night intrigued me when I found this article on CNN, which even got me to posting about it on my blog in such a long time.

I just hope someone who just happens to come across my blog and this post also becomes a little more interested about this matter. But more importantly, from now on, keep me posted on how so many species I know are disappearing and how I am contributing to that. 

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