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The effect of technology on our life : (please correct my mistakes) Currently, no one can complete his life without using technology because we will lose many opportunities for achievement, for example, the field of education focus on the use of sophisticated technology that has emerged with the invention of the internet and the computer but technology is a double-edged sword if we use it in a good way we will make a huge success and if we use it in a bad way the community became damaged, so we must use it carefully .

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The effect of technology on our life : (please correct my mistakes)

Currently, no one can complete his life  live without using the technology means, because otherwise we will lose many opportunities for achievement, for example, the field of education focus depends on using sophisticated technology that has been emerged with the invention of the internet and the computer science, but however technology is a double-edged sword if we use it is being used in a good way we will that would help to make a huge success and in the contrary, it would damage the community relationships  if it was utilized in a bad ways. So we must use it carefully. 


Your writing is very good, I have added some other words just to make the article more comprehensive.

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The effect of technology on our lives : (please correct my mistakes) (It's plural here because we have more than one life.)

Currently, no one can complete his/her (Always try to include both genders when making general statements about people.) life without using technology because we will lose many opportunities for achievements. For example, the field of education focuses on the use of sophisticated technology that has emerged with the invention of the internet and the computer. but (While there is no rule against it, it's better to not start sentences with conjunctions such as "and," "but," and "or.") However, technology is a double-edged sword: if we use it in a good way, we will make a can be huge highly successful; (This isn't an error in grammar; it simply sounds better.) and but (The next part is the opposite of what you just wrote, so it's better to use "but" instead of "and.") if we use it in a bad way, the communities can become damaged (Since you are writing about possibility, you should not use past tense.), so we must use it carefully.

Hello Hanna! This is actually pretty nicely written. I've made some corrections as well as provided some comments. I hope they're helpful. Please let me know if you have any further questions, and keep working hard toward English proficiency! =)

EDIT: Changed "focus" to "focuses." That's a subject-verb agreement rule since your subject is "field."

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