DEBATE ABOUT TECHNOLOGY
In recent years, technology has spread very rapidly by showing us animations, graphic effects, simulations, virtual reality and interactive communication.
At this point, the question arise spontaneously : Is it possible, that one day technology will replace people ?
I really think so, and I will convince you of that giving you arguments, examples and percentages
Today, there are many large manufacturing industries (mainly food and mechanics) who decide to use machines instead of workers.
This, above all in large companies, allows to cut down on production costs and especially labor, by lowering the sales price of the final product.
Also, as we all know, factory work is characterized by incessant rhythms, under-pressure work, high degree of error and risk factor.
If you use specific machines or computers, you may benefit from mental and health benefits because the machines can be subjected to incessant rhythms and may also carry out more dangerous actions and tasks.
For example, it would be much more convenient to use computers and machinery in chemical companies where they have been subjected to harmful substances, or mechanics where high-risk tools are used.
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DEBATE ABOUT TECHNOLOGY
In recent years, technology has spread very rapidly by showing us animations, graphic effects, simulations, virtual reality and interactive communication.At this point, the question arises: Is it possible, that one day technology will replace people?
I really think so, and I will convince you of that giving you arguments, examples and percentages.
Today, there are many large manufacturing industries (mainly food and mechanics) that decide to use machines instead of workers.
This, above all in large companies, allows for the reduction of production costs and especially labor, by lowering the sales price of the final product.
Also, as we all know, factory work is characterized by incessant rhythms, under-pressure work, a high degree of error and risk factor.
If you use specific machines or computers, you may benefit from mental and health benefits because the machines can be subjected to incessant rhythms and may also carry out more dangerous actions and tasks.
For example, it would be much more convenient to use computers and machinery in chemical companies where people have been subjected to harmful substances, or mechanics where high-risk tools are used.
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The language here is excellent. :) But the language doesn't seem to be encoding the right thinking. In the first paragraph you say you'll convince us that "one day technology will replace people". But the piece goes on to convince us that "technology spares people from having to do menial and unpleasant work", so it'd be good if that's what you say in the first paragraph. "...by lowering the sales price" is the wrong logic; "... which allows them to lower the sales price" is logically correct, and true in some cases, but it doesn't support your argument. As a manufacturer I'd prefer to reduce my costs and keep prices the same so that I can increase profit; automation can help me to do that. Again, your grasp of English is extremely good, I'd say.
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