The Early Bird Gets the First Worm1

This is my 2 minutes‘ speech in for my English oral test the next Tuesday. Can you help me?

Since this is a formal speech you are giving... so the writing style is going to be different.

"The early bird gets the first worm"2.  This is a historical proverb which was first seen in John Ray's writings in of 1670. It means that those taking opportunities the moment they appear will have a greater chance of success.  the first person who does something early has the best shot at success or that opportunities are available to the first competitors. “Early bird gets the first worm” 3 This is a positive attitude towards life4, and It also tells us that we should make full use of our time.

Just take Using myself for an example: When I was in the my senior year in school, my life was full of diligence very busy. I have many memories about that unusual period of time5. I got wake up at 6am in the morning everyday just except the on Sunday. In the winter, when the moon is still on the sky. Then when the sky is still dark, 6I caught catch the bus to begin my study for school. I really learnt a lot of many things in that time then, and that It was also was the richest best time in that period of my life. As a result of My hard work diligence paid off.  I went was able to get into the CCNU. However the diligence goes far from meStill I cannot goof off. Now, I got up at am still waking at 7:30am and even till sometimes at 8 sometimes. If the first class is about to over, ok, no problem, I’ll still at bed when the second class begins7. Day after day, I don’t feel my life is enrichedment but the blankness. I even don’t have any improvements in in these last two years! When I ask myself:”what’s wrong with my life? ”, I thought the answer is that I don’t didn't make full use of my time.

Another English proverb says, “Lost time is never found again.” Time is so precious that it cannot be purchased bought with money8. If you catch your morning timehad planned your morning then your whole day is not wasted scheduled. So, get Wake up early to appreciate the magnificent to he magnificence of a scenery of sunrise or make some free time to enjoy the beauty of a sunset. 9, and Make full use of your time wisely, make your life rich.  Every situation is different. Let's not forget the second part of the proverb, "The early bird gets the first worm."  It is "The second mouse gets the cheese!" 10

1.   I have never heard this proverb being expressed like this.  All my life I have known it as, "The early bird catches the worm."  I may be wrong.  So if you had seen it as being written exactly as what you wrote, then I am wrong and learnt something new today. 

2.  You should make the proverb as your opening statement to get the attention of your readers.  The opening statement should be the main theme of your speech.

3.  Now that you have the proverb is the opening statement, you don't need to repeat unless it is for emphasis which I do not see in your current writing.

4.  In speeches, try not to use long sentences.  Your audience will lose interest.  Use short sentences if possible.

5.  What so unsual about that period in your life that is so different from others.  So take it out.  You don't have much time to be pendantic.

6.  The moon is always in the sky even in the day time.  Also it is not expressed like this in English.

7.  This sentences makes no meaning in English.  Translate to Chinese to see and you see what I mean.  If you really want me to express your sentiment correctly, write it in Chinese.

8.  Another way of making your speech is to cite a Chinese proverb. "An inch of time, an inch of gold.  An inch of gold can't buy an inch of time."  一寸光陰一寸金,寸金難買寸光陰

9.  I feel that giving just one example does not have enough emphasis for what you are trying to expound.  Better to have a constrasting example to make your speech more interesting.

10.  Your conclusion is noble but in terms of a good speech, it lacks the punch.  Conclude with with you start off with, this is the proverb.  By adding this, the audience will have something to think about and that will make your speech more memorable.  This is a very effect trick in good speech making. 上得山多終遇虎 vs 不入虎穴焉得虎子!